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i might re do this depended on the feed i get for it...i personally like it but i'm iffy on how it turned out...tell me what ya think....

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225465
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=224942

leave links i'll return the favor....

uppin this.....

aight......


beat: lol.... reminds me of what would happen if Nintendo and Lil Jon made babies.


first verse: aight.... lil choppy in places... but you got this basics... just gotta polish your delivery... cuz the verse got all the fixings for a banger... yea... id most deff re-spit this... get the delivery right doggs... take your time wit it... cuz this got potential...

hook: i like this hook for real... but you gotta respit it... cuz you got some pauses... and shit.. that work... but not the way you workin em... you feel me???

2nd: yea..... smooth verse... you juss gotta respit for finess...


potential= 8.5/10

as is= 6.4/10



RTF

thanks for the feed homie...uppin

ehh wtf @ this beat? lool not bad, not my style tho lol

aiight on this. I can tell you improvin' a lot. Still got a lot of places needing elevating, but everyone needs this. and as long as you going in forward direction it's a plus. so good job on that man. Delivery needs imrpovement, really wasn't seeing it as you meant what you said. so redo shit def, put more umph into it, nah mean?

hook was pretty coo tho. not bad. should redo tho if you got time to make it the best, ya feel me?

overall, man, from where you are good steps forward. 7.5/10 stay up man. and RTF:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225575

thanks homie....wtf at everyone laughin at the beat i thought the shit was bangin lol...o well uppin

RTF if you can ~_~

uppin for feed...

playing- beat is to club, flow is ok, emotion is ok, hook isnt good bro, you dont flow on the hook.
second verse flow starts off a bit off, lyrics arent good.
not feeling the "ask the ex......... ask the ex before her.."

ok track... nothing to special.

rtf on "million eyes,dedication to god"

yea if you don't like music from the south then you aint gonna like me...i'm gettin that vibe from you...no big deal...uppin

pretty good stuff....
you need to chill out with your delivery tho...you sound like your forcing some things....n i guess it puts alot of it off a lil specially in the first verse....like the hook, but re do it....i trust you can do it with better emotion.....your intro i didnt like....if your gonna keep it, turn it down a lil.....this isnt hate man, i like the song....its just some things you could fix to make it better.....good shit. rtf man....peace

i don't see any hate in that homie it's honest feedback which is what i wanted...i understand what ya sayin i'll return the favor here in a couple...thanks for the feed...

uppin this shit

not my type of beat....

the X-box line is wayy to long....the hater line to...watch putting to many words in a sentence..quality is clean...sumthings off here....the come in the 2nd verse is off..to many words...emotion is their ...lyrics r basic but ok...hooks ok....china line was iight....ur flows a lil chopy wen it's not off..dubs r ok...nicer then a granma..see,don't use basic metas like that..makes u sound dumb...

not a great track bro..keep droppin

RTF if u will
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225893