Oblivious Artists
 

Short single, I'll grab my links soon. Fe'll free to drop your links to your songs, I'd gladly return the feedback if it's good.

www.myspace.com/paranoidxl

"Olivious Artists"

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225803
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2709860

ok...quality is kinda muffled...vocals sound overprocessed....flow...started out too abrupt...an its choppy in spots in verse 1....u shoulda threw a hook on it...not really a break to talk over....delivery was decent..u def using ya voice better...lyrics was decent....jus needs to be polished..not bad but coulda been better.........1

Listenin...yeah the robotic style has gone fam...im feelin it....flow is decent...bt yea kinda choppy in places like trip said...but emotion has upped...and delivery is pretty good..lyrics are good too..im feelin it...yeah shudda done a hook..but yea this was a good track..flow was decent upped alot and delivery l;ess robotic and more enjoyable...nice 1

Ok..BEats Nice

Aight

Flows Gettin Better,More Smooth And Fluent Now,Lil Choppy But Its Gettin Better,YourPresence Is Much Better Seem Confident,You Dont Seem Shy Like When I HeardYou Before,EMotions Upped,Deliverys Koo,qualitys Not Bad,Seems A Lil Weird Qual Though,I Dont Know Why.Lyrics Were Koo

Keep Up Your Elevating.

wassup, mmmm your myspace player aint working, let me try again...okay well it aint worlking, but send it to me when youll get on msn iight

Trickle...
you sound really boring in the begining intro it doesnt get me excited...to many effects on ya vocals...flow fell of at about the third bar....theese lyrics are good but your delivery and emotion lack so do ya swagger... you gotta sell yaself to people.... the hook is pretty dope ... first guy was a few days better than the second guy...haha.. yeah just keep elevating.

for oblivious artist...
shoulda put a hook in...it was just one verse dissing people on the fact they rap for money... dont really make much sense to me... the flow was good lyrics coulda used some work so could have emotion there were a couple good stand out lines...i'm trying to focus on the lyricism of this song because the overall banger appeal isnt there...i like music that you can dance too...6/10

What's hot:
beat is slick
flow is good...But, you're starting to sound like triple N...not bad, but keep your identity


What's not:
You're starting to sound like other rappers on RV, mainly triple N...watch that...keep your own identity...It's okay to incorporate elements from other rappers, but don't get lost in that.

Track did not have many quotables.

Overall: pretty decent bro...I think you need to work on your song making skills tho...put together a piece that has discrete parts, adding up to a complete track...This seemed like practice...GOOD practice, but practice

wow man, your best ive heard from you, flow is pretty dope, your quality is wayyyy better, this your best, lol if you need a hook holla at me, canadian thing man lol, yeah man lyrics aRE dope, i think its good enough to put it on my mp3, what i dont like, is the intro, dunno, aint that lyrical, the first bar is just fire i dunno why, the flow is just fucking perfect lol, good drop bro

thanks for the feed yall, uppin....

lets see.
I like the beat, kinda eary.....Good flow, and delivery. Like your style.
Nothing really not to like here in my opinion....
Only thing I can maybe nok is it's overall lasting apeal. Not a big hype song,
If u get what Im sayin.

Nice Track

Listening...

Beat's trippy...quality sounds better. Flow comes in...it is definetely better, it's pretty start stop though. Breath control needs work...delivery is good. Flow seems to struggle in some spots. This a good track man. Keep it up.