Hype
 

Quick track, tryed some new stuff here.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3776889

brb with links.

Will RTF

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2716269
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2716656

Not feelin the beat first off.

Not riding the beat that well. Your flow is off for the beat. Try not to keep your voice the same tone the whole song, you were way too fast.

Mainly your flow killed you. Cuz it didn't suit the beat that well.

What's hot:
flow is pretty decent tho...fits the beat


What's not:
voice sounded jamaican at the start, mixed with a UK slang...too weird for me bro
not feelin the beat

Overall: Not my style son...but, your energy and flow were good on this



1

aight thanks .

uppin


will RTF.

Ya flow seems a lil off, but tha energy is there...........can really make out what ur sayin...prob cuz i'm not use to UK rappers........could up ya quality too.......aiite keep at it man........

pz

~1~

cheers mate .

now look daubs... i am not going to hate on you ...you are just a kid... but for one .. u.k. cats shouldnt try to rap tough for your patois makes you sound like a buncha fags to begin with ...you should rap about flowers and bunnies and shit .... you are sporatic with the flow... slow it down a bit especially for this beat...i would have to say the writing isnt too terribly bad... but it is hard to understand ... and being american your slang is different ... i dont know about the chip shot line ... but at least youve got balls enough to spit shit... try to find some better beats slow down dont get your knickers all in a knot... take some exlax ... or stick to graphix...

Aight on the feed, but mate...just cause we in england dont mean its bare pussys. Everywhere has its areas, if you walked round here with that attituse youd get a slap to be real with you.

But thanks for the feedback.

beat starts off soundin pretty dope...like i could rip this shit...your qual is wack... i cant understand a word you say... i think you could be a lil smoother with this beat slow it down.. like lemme get this beat...but ya... iz ok

all i could hear was "accapella" through ou tthis whole thing. No hate bro, but you sound like a hyped english chipmunk.
I think you should slow it down alot, and try a slow flow, with some pauses and adlibs through out.
Quality isnt good.
Flow is not riding well with the beat, lyrics I can comment on cause i couldnt understand what you said.

cool thanks .

Will take it into consideration next time.

listening.....

Beat is odd.......a little different. Not really feeling it too much until it actually kicks in. Wow....i think I've been on this board too much cause you have one of the thickest UK accents I've heard and I still understood every word :(. Anyway, shit wasn't taht bad. It needed a little more umph to it though.....and it was a bit short.

lol cool.

thanks.