Don't Wunna Be Right...its so fuckin real
 

word a track about how i feel about life and the fuck world telling me what to do

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3780008

word get at me

links -
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2717150
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=226196

i'm checkin this out right now

the beat is pretty hot

the flow is really nice....you sound like em a lil bit....your lyrics are pretty nice...

this is a nice lil joint patna lol

keep it up

Man shits ill. Im diggin ya lyrics, delivery, flow... all that shit.

Theres room for improvement though, but I feel as though if I tell you what to do it wont do shit. Just keep practicing and you'll keep improving.

aiight jay...

the content is on point ... but ya flow is a tad off a lil bit... every now and then it seems like ya forcing some werds to fit in a line... i'm loving the beat, man... the emotion is kool... ya outro quality is actually better than ya verse's...lol ... ya verse vocals were a lil low but i could still make out what you were saying... smooth lil ditty right here... make a nuk nuk wanna stop and think about the things around him... werd... tracks like that got power, man...werd... keep pumping them messages out there... and have fun with this hip-hop shyt cuz there's gon be times when ya get tired of it... but never stop da hip-hop!!!! good shyt overall

word i.g. tell me where it sounds forced n shit
cuz this is a track suposed to go on my album....this is first cut, i like to do three or more....so yea help me edit this shit right

aiight man... lemme listen again and i'll get back at you with that... don't get me wrong... it's a kool track... but it's da lil things that ya don't catch sometines...werd...i'll holla in the forum when i get a chance

yea i know...cuz when you write it you have a diff view then other people....thats why im tryin to see what yall pick up on n fix it

What's hot:
beat is pretty coo...I like the melody
flow isn't bad
Lyrics are personal = good


What's not:
You need to up your presence...you sounded set far back in the beat...up your dubs...that'll fix some of that

Delivery could be more dynamic, not terrible though

Overall: Hook was too complicated...sounded like a verse...IMO, hooks should be repetitive, almost chant like to "hook" the listener

Good drop tho otherwise



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