The Truth And Nothing But - Drop Links - tryna to shed my newbie skin
 

This is my first serious attempt at an audio, i read the tutorials around here, and tried to apply it to my tracks.

My mic only cost 10 dollars, so i put alot of work into making the vocals sound nice :).

Anyways, be harsh, tell me what i can work on so i can elevate

Halfway the thru the 2nd verse i just decided to freestyle, so if theres any freestyle heads around here and wanna get down some time, let me know, i can freestyle all day.tryna to elvate in that department too

Be Honest is all i want, just dont tell me to quit or some shit cuz im seriously tryna to elevate



"This is my showcase"
http://www.soundclick.com/catastrophy





http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=2731829
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227327

flow:um...7...not feelin it.. needs more work
lyrics: didnt get it either.. were u tryna tell a story or sumthin??
beat:10......producer is mad crazzy for dis 1

wasnt feelin da intro either

man sorry..6 overall.....but for ya first trakk ..it was coo

aight.... I LOVE THIS BEAT.....


lol... you followed Waynes flow on this.... sound like Jeezy some spots....

you cant really hear everything you sayin.... you gotta uppp your vocals a bit... like 3.5....

actualy... upp it in the beginin... cuz the end it was fine... in the begining it was like you was whispering... so i couldnt hear your verse....

if this is a freestlye.... it was aight.... untill it got around 2mins and 30 seconds... it got pretty weak .... a lot damns.... a lot of geniric stuff to keep it going... like Ed Lover.... lol... from 105.1... that nigga be rhymin like you just did.... WOW... that cough at the end was a bit much....

things to work on:
well.... next time you should prolly write a track... Freestyles are coo too... but .... this is Songs Forum... you know.... so.... write a track.... upp your vocals when you record.... and dont free style an outro to your track....

aight dogs.... keep dropin....


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RTF

AYYY YO BOI...
u the designer right?...
shii...i was in a crew wit u but i forgot what...

anyways illl check out the shit later