COME BACK inspired by proof
 

yea with proof dying i just started to think about death n shit....then this beat came on my playlist and it inspired me to write this song....tell me what you think

COME BACK - http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3870085






http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2733074 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227452

beat sounds kinda cool......at the beginin.....

lyrics...is dope... very emotional...very deep.. yet pretty bumpable.. i love your delivery... your hoook is dope on this too....
i really liked the last verse....like ya lil tribute to the passed...good shit j
good ass track 8/10...

uppin' for feed peoples i WILL RETURN FEED so get at me if you want some on your song

ok playing.


like the way the beat comes in...
intro's cool.
"your the one they want"
^flow fucked up on that, aswell as a coupel of other spots.
emotion is good.
"heaven they are lasted"
^flow fucked up on that aswell.
main problem is flow in this bro, will be a dope track with a more constant spit in it.
Soun sliek you kinda dont know the rhyme yet, still reading it sorta ish.

good track though.

agrees with ysdat... the message in the song is dope but ya flow takes away from it alil.... work on that... beat is cool... when ya do ya hook ya gotta make it stand out more... it's like the verse and the hook kinda sound the same if ya catch what i'm saying.... the only reason i can tell it's da hook is because of the repetition... this song could be so much better if you put more feeling into it... ya words are powerful enough but it's not enough if it doesn't sound like you REALLY GOING THROUGH IT while you're saying it, nah mean?....

track coulda been about 8.5 from me but it loses a point for ineffective emotional output... SAY IT LIKE YOU MEAN IT, HOMIE!!!..lol


7.5