Smile ON my FAce (hot story track) drop links!!!
 

yea i wanted to try a concept track with a message behind it. i been doin too much battle rap shit so heres some deep shit for yall. im really lookin for sum feedback on this one so lemme know whats good. thanks yall p

i also replied to enygmas track w/ q n also black magiks new track so lemme know if i gotta put up links before shuttin this down

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c'mon jo..............

oh word you're back, the beat is pretty ill, who made it, the quality is better than before, pretty dope man, i like your quality, yup your still my favorite mc on rapverse, nice story track, peace

fuck man this song is on repeat, i fucking love it word this the best track on rv so far

First thing I noticed right in the beginning was the flow seemed.....unthoughtout. It seemed like you were just making it up as you went and you weren't really confident with what you wanted to say. I know I've heard better from you in this area. I like the message and lyrics though :)

Good shit though :thumbup:™

i agree with this man

ha ha ha jp jp, word speats good lookin on that, tha beat was by arkane productions or sumn like that i dunno. yea n to e, i wrote this up pretty fast but as for tha makin it up as u go along shit.. well. thats kinda tha shit im on now, tha almost free'd shit just cleaned up. thats all i do now.. free, on sum big n hov shit ya kno? but yea preaciate tha feed much thankx

quote it word :thumbup: jkin jokin lol

listening...

beat is dope as hell...

your flow has gotten a lil better....but it still seems a lil inconsistent to me...

hmm people could grasp the story a lil bit better if you didnt use the same tone throughout.....its kinda of like that robotic monotone feel that u need to get rid of.


at the end the dubs kinda seem a bit off and werent lined up well....

presence was real good. delivery was ok...i just thought u needed to switch the tons of voice up with the story to grasp the listeners attention more...i know i would have followed it better anyways.


not a bad track though.....nothing id download but id prolly listen again or something

i really like your style, really chill, one thing is you should speak a little more clearly. the effects in the background are pretty dope, you could be really good, needs a little swagger, you seem a little shaky, be confident, even if its not a bragadocious song. for the most part i liked your flow, best line was the bum stared back in the mirror...good shit man...good fit with beat. its true money doesn't buy hapiness. good shit.

dude were ya been foo...

am feelin tha track u upped ya quality nice

yea thanks i stopped doin like 342 overdubbs n got a pretty nice/expensive mic. peep for new shit tonite or tomorrow thatll b killin em, i just gotta get sum1 to upload it not on my slow ass cpu, i keep gettin 99.8 uploaded n then it freezes fuckers... lol but yea good looks on that feed

word listenin...... likin the beat........ nice storytellin flow, not real intricate, but its decent, especially for tellin a story..... smerk on his face, lol *looks at title*

findin happiness in the worst of times, nice concept in this shit...... its short as all hell tho, u coulda made it alil longer.... the lil break/hook was alil weird but it works fine..... pretty decent track, MAKE THIS SHIT LONGER.... maybe add another verse inbetween the first and second one.... nice return omen

^good looks on tha feed. only reason its this short is cuz thats how long tha beat was, n i didnt wanna go thru loopin it. it was just a on tha spot quick shitter track to do, didnt put too much time into it nonetheless loopin shit. but yea good looks on this. b sure to peep my new track too