g's the devil
 

definition of a true g is nuthin but street wisdom
stay clear of imprisonment and it will all make sense
the worlds a notebook n the mind becomes a pen
no more being hopeful cos the street aint one to forgive
mercy has no friends so keep livin until the end
willin to do whatever it takes to make it big
duckin cops n feds all afta ur head
seem to be chasin only ur races muthafuckin racists
hope they all dead keepin it real packin steel dont believe in fear
it was singed with the blast of the gat
residue of bloody fiends who said they were ur friends
nuthin but enemies never a friend of me
ya cease with each toke of the weed but please
this wasnt how it was supposed to be
i guess the sreets was too much for a g to clutch
losin the grip on it trigger finger brusin from all the shootins
who flipd the script man fuk this shit i cant pull no more
cos the devils tuggin it

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Can't leave decent feed but I have got to go !!

uping complexity and vocab,.. nothing really got my attention..
it was an alright drop need to elevate your writing fams !!

keep em coming !!

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not bad dude

had some simple lines but you still did your thing here

had some cool lines, not bad at all

" willin to do whatever it takes to make it big
duckin cops n feds all afta ur head
seem to be chasin only ur races muthafuckin racists
hope they all dead keepin it real packin steel dont believe in fear
it was singed with the blast of the gat
residue of bloody fiends who said they were ur friends
nuthin but enemies never a friend of me
ya cease with each toke of the weed but please
this wasnt how it was supposed to be
i guess the sreets was too much for a g to clutch"

^fav lines

I'm a GD and no I'm not the devil lol

but this was an okay piece just elevate a little

Rhyme Shceme Was Simple, But It Was Deep & Metaphorical...you Can Tell When Somebodys Writen A Bunch Of Bullshit, & When They Writen From Experience & From The Heart...you Was Speakin The Truth.

nie verse

simple rhyme scheme but u was tryna get a message across

u spat the truth

just improve the rhymin scheme a lil bit...