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Mentor 05-20-06 03:23 AM

where the worlds at
 
having dreams of guys wit big guns and shotgun slugs attackin me
and pretty soon i'll have more airtime than big pun's lung capacity
committing every crime under the sun so bitch just pass the weed
i almost quit rap but i aint gon be done so just stop asking me
i might be expelled from my education but ima still help the nation
i'ma sell my help to our generation fightin the depths of hell towards satan
hell already took over planet earth the devil had it ever since birth
bodies fillin caskets during this verse who knows which bastard'll go first
so i do whatever i can ta fix it..be better if my raps can stay explicit
so the moral can truly glisten...i just need the words for people ta listen


i'll finish this and post the links later im tired as hell and goin ta bed pc

The-King 05-22-06 02:07 AM

its a pretty good verse man, i liked the subject u spoke about

good flow

my favourite line was: "...pretty soon i'll have more airtime than big pun's lung capacity"

get some more multis in there

i give it 6.5/10

check out my verse wen u got time:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228591

B eZ

XpLiCiT187 05-22-06 02:09 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Mentor
hell already took over planet earth the devil had it ever since birth
bodies fillin caskets during this verse who knows which bastard'll go first



DECENT SHIT, NICE WORDPLAY...EVERYBODY KEEP DROPPIN LIL HALF ASSED SHORT VERSES DOE, THIS WASNT EVEN A 16. AT LEAST 6 MORE BARS ADDED TO IT WOULD MAKE IT BETTER, BUT FOR DA MOST PART EVERY LINE WAS NICE, GOOD SHIT.

Kawn Flixx 05-25-06 09:37 PM

Closed read the rules

Mentor 05-26-06 01:35 AM

oh shit i forgot the links
GOD DAMN IT...where's my weed


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