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scanz 05-25-06 11:20 PM

without pain.
 
another dream this one made me sad... i dremnt i got hit by a car and was paralysed from the waist down. made my life hard as hell............ word... scary shit

ima tell u how it went.... just listen


walking down the street, damn i feel strange today.
lookin around bout to cross, without lookin both ways.
shoud have know better, stop then look but didnt do it.
placed my foot on the pavement and got hit. damn how stupid.

3:07 pm

damn, i wake up. looking at the clock ive was knocked out cold.
i was out for 3 hours and the doctor said i had broken a few bones.
broke my lower back. said i might not be able to walk ever again.
i was like ur kidding doc. could u come a little closer and say it again.
he said it. but i didnt believe him. i tried to get up and fell str8 on the floor.
hit my head as i fell in disbelief.couldnt feel my legs. never had that feeling b4.
my heart starts racing. i got scared and fell in to a state of shock.
thinking i wont be able to do the things i love... my life has been stoped.
the clock for me cesed to tock. i now live a life never able to walk.
im condemmed in a chair. but i still wish i was a figuer of chalk.
this feeling that i get from others. like they feel bad for my legs.
this wouldnt have happend if i looked both ways thinkin the light was red.
this permant bed. im stuck in. this chair on wheels feels so wierd.
im 16 and cant walk this has now become something i feared.
tears dribble down my face seeing my life flash before my eyes.
ill have kids that will grow up while my head only reach there thieghs.
all the lies i hear. saying therapy might help u regain strength again.
but i heard the truth from god. he says u wont be able to walk my friend.
its the end of all the things i loved so much, how will i get by now....
ill need some one to help me as i roll. i dont know if i should cry now.
but wow. it took a second for my life to change right in front of me.
now i wished i would have looked both ways before crossing the street.


All of a sudden i wake up... wut? it was all a dream.
that was somethin wierd. another seldom seen. (seldom = something not often)
i hug my legs and jump up and down with happyness.
i thank the lord for invisionment that left me blessed.
the lord gave me a vision. a way to pervent this curse.
the curse i have explain with out pain in this verse.

hope u like it...... :thumbup:

Kawn Flixx 05-26-06 03:32 PM

Drop two links or this will be closed

But hmm this was a pretty good drop from you homie... one of the best ive seen you... had alot of feeling and good emotions in your drop..only thing that could have been a bit better was your wording of certain words.. us better vocab and try to shorten up your lines... make em short (not two short) and sweet.

scanz 05-26-06 11:56 PM

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228469
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227183

word toke. thankz for the feed. it was kinda scary seeing my future like that.... uppin this piece.

XpLiCiT187 05-27-06 03:41 AM

THIS PIECE WAS NICE, HAD A GOOD CLEAR BEGINIG, MIDDLE, & END... EVERYTHING WAS EXPLAINED WELL AND PUT INTO GOOD DETAIL SO THE READER ALWAYS GETS WHATS GOIN ON... YA MOMS AINT NEVER TELL YOU TO LOOK BOTH WAYS BEFORE YOU CROSS THE STREET? lol

scanz 05-27-06 01:22 PM

she did but for some reason i forgot in my dream.... lol


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