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Kristina.
my mind is lost in thoughts about you.
I wanna stop the fights and do what it takes to marry you. I wanna be with you forever girl with you in my arms. My 1 and only share to bear the hugs express our love your my shining star. Watch as your eyes sparkle in pictures of me. and listen for the crackles in your lips as they boldge out gently. im so lonely without you here while your at your place. I reminense of all the smiles that crossed your face. I cant sleep I dont know what to do my hearts callin out for you. cant enter my own room without you grabin pillows and expect em to move like u do. |
uppin this fam ok please. :thumbup:
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this wasnt anything special.
not knocking you dude. im sure if this was recorded like you said you planned to it woulda been fine. going to a beat and what not. but as for written poetry the whole idea was rather corny, played and simple..you had no apparent metaphors no irony nor complex vocabulary...just basic rhyme and off flow verse. elevate..no hate just trying to help. |
Pm me two links to have this reopened.
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