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Sick. 07-22-06 11:26 PM

The American Dream [ part I & II ]
 
Freedom,

I've heard that it's mine,
but i've seen no such thing.
I've seen films and read books
that speak of the American Dream,
but it's just that - a dream.
If it weren't perhaps we'd have freedom.
...perhaps


perhaps we'd have equality,
but they'd still be more equal than us
in this dream of theres.
They tell us the dream is ours - the people.
But i've had no such dream.
Some may dream such dreams - but not I.
...not I


Part II

from the proud kings of old
to the kings who now hide face
ashamed to announce tyranny
afraid of revolution, and mutiny amongst
- amongst a nation of malitia
waiting in shadows for a spark
a single ember to ignite a nation
- a nation not under god..
but indivisible in its liberties
the right to bare arms
the right to speak out
the right to a quick and speedy trial
but they will receive no such trial so long
as i am here to over see the revolution...
the spark.
the single light that will guide a nation.
one nation.
our nation.

home of the brave.


atti? 07-23-06 09:36 AM

Needs two links man, I wont close it because you haven't been around in awhile... But try and get those by the end of the day.

Sick. 07-23-06 04:28 PM

booo! but here ya go anyways.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231577
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2801314

Sick. 07-24-06 03:48 PM

p.s. this site sucks and you people suck.
now someone leave me some feed or atleast tell me i suck.

ANYYYTHINGGGGGGG. thank you. :)

Dickard. 07-24-06 03:58 PM

id like to see all of these parts together because i can see this has a lot of meaning...and all of them together..it would say so much and make such good points...that someone would kill yhou from another country cuz ur shit is so valid and point proven..i adore it...keep it up nucca

Sick. 07-24-06 04:07 PM

its not meant to offend other countries
dickhead - its about our own.

but thanks for trying. :)

Dickard. 07-24-06 04:08 PM

and the ppl who read and see how u are trying to unite the u.s as 1 and stop the bullshit will kill u cuz they want us to collapse

Sick. 07-24-06 04:12 PM

your a mess my friend.
let me break it down for you..
the goverment sucks and they lie.
im not trying to unite anyone im trying to
say fuck bush and all that jazz.
and if you dont get that then kill yourself..
very slowly with a rusty used butter knife.

Sick. 07-24-06 04:13 PM

p.s. no ones going to kill me :)

Dickard. 07-24-06 04:14 PM

maybe i just didnt read it.
cuz the content was boring.......
and you tell me to kill myself?
then no one will be able to go up to rockland and save ur ass if kooley attacks you.

dont forget that drunk night of urs wen i killed u and kenny nicca

Sick. 07-24-06 04:17 PM

ok now you wanna get personal.
well lemme tell you this!! idk i got nothing lol

but you suck and i hate you.

Dickard. 07-24-06 04:20 PM

lol.

but seriously, if this is only part 1 gather the other parts around...becuz i feel taht this isnt enough to fully grasp your point of view at all..expand your horizon and play the field with your thoughts and complexity more...your digging in at the right point now with the other parts stay fluent and dope. peace

Sick. 07-25-06 11:52 AM

your an idiot.

no joke.

Terumoto 07-29-06 10:19 PM

I thought it was dope. Lot of truth in it.

atti? 07-31-06 01:52 PM

^Don't leave feedback like that again or I'll delete your poem.

This was a nice piece. The format and meter of it suggested that it would make an excellent slam styled work. I don't know if you do audio or anything, but it's something to concider because this would be very strong hearing it read aloud with all of the intended tones and vocal shifts. Very quick piece, but I felt like you have very nice wording and a strong tone that really fit the content. Uum ya, hard to really pick apart because it was so short... I'd like to see something quite a bit longer next time just so I can see your versitility. Nice job with this though.


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