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scanz 08-07-06 10:10 PM

critical...
 

my lyrical flow is that i know and crazed to create.
out of hate people threw at me on a clean plate.
BUT i still skate, so i can return the hate to there face.
for this hispanic race, i will disinagrate a disgrace.
305 till i die, or till i touch the sky. which ever comes first.
since birth i was hated against. but im still on this earth.
i still disperse. and will till i take my last breath.
with out a vest, i will stay on the rise till my fuckin death.
will continue to write. in a black game that is so tight.
i will still fight so i can earn my lyrical right.
and just might. go pro in this twisted illusion.
full of prostatution, sickness and confusion.
all abusion i will take to show where i stand.
cus i demand to be loved. without a glock in my hand.

a critical state of mind is the grind i chose to lead.
i will bleed for my 305, untill then lets smoke some weed.
and plead on our knees, prey for a better day.
to turn the page so we can continue our way.
continue our stay as latins in the american dream.
sure we hustle and lean. but we will stay clean.
some shit seldom seen, but we dont care.
we stay on the game with these rows in our hair.
continue to fight for wut we think is right.
taken a stand to demand to stay alive at night.
no more gang bangers. we lost to much already.
when do u think it will stop? when its to heavy?
lets get ahead. lets take it out while we still can.
lets put down the mac's and tecs'. lets drop the 9s from our hands.

kinda of a freestye. just tell me wut u think hommies.

Ysdat 08-08-06 02:24 AM

two links or this will be closed, once you have your links in i will edit this with feed.

Critic 08-09-06 09:14 AM

Scanz you have really impressed me ! I remamber when you first started here
I could see u had it in you but you still wasn't translating the right words across.

You have elevated a lost since Jan, the only thing you need to do now is step
up your vocab and got more complex. Read over Open Mics mainly from people
like I am unreal, Mr Multie, Lola, Tim, Ysdat....

Just look at how they write, the way they paint a picture of what they are writing
about giving you a vivid image of the verse. it's up to you to make the next step,..

stay up and keep writing this was dope btw.

1~

Critic 08-09-06 09:20 AM

Also L.I and Myself !! didn't mean to forget them, two real dope writers u could learn
alot from them.

scanz 08-09-06 10:15 PM

word thankz for the post. ive been on vacation for a bit. nuttin really influenced me, but i started doin audio freestyles on my comp. some of them are tight. but im gettin back in the game real soon. so dont worry.


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