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A Living Chess Game
take the right or left lane?, the smallest things in life makes ya less sane
‘til dreams show scars, but what seems so hard is just a chess game in the record its said, we’re misled and treacherous heads cause fact is that as kids we learned to play checkers instead I ain’t saying that its a medal or I’m on some distant level but sometimes I can even see God playing it with the Devil to flee from the hell and feel what I‘ve felt, here’s some advice that helps become good at chess and odds are you’ll be good at life as well but don’t credit me or no rhyme, for what a chess game shows why all you have to know is the pieces and the rules they go by but first open the board, no way you cant maneuver this right the whole thing‘s filled with squares, symbolic of losers in life it wasn’t made too good.., destroy it?, in many ways you could it has light and dark blocks, which represents neighborhoods each piece is a type of person, that’s restricted to certain blocks segregation will always exist whether it works or not cause the government’s never straight forward with its crooked ways not nice and vicious, just like the Bishop.., which in chess took its place along with that of politicians, criminals, freaks and gays with indecent traits, those not cared about when beat and slain unlike the rich, whose money defeats disease and lets leaches eat these are the rooks, not free from the crooks, that make ends meet with ease while as the pawns, the poor struggle with ordinary troubles and take small steps all stressed, as the cost to live daily doubles there’s no fleeing they’re told, but some hold on deep in their souls cause of rags to riches stories with pawns reaching their goals at night there’s knights.., the drug addicts, terrorists and felons, see they’re known for L‘s, whether it’s a blunt, suicide or felony they usually avoid crowds and are like dogs that destroy hounds but are commonly called hoarse, since that’s how their voice sounds they’re shallow and dark, while others candles are sparked but whatever piece you are, don’t forget to follow your heart put it above riches, love with it.., and make sure its intact in fact it’s the king, and nothing’s more important than that it keeps you living through starving nights, ensuring bites always guard it right cause you’ll only get one heart in life just as precious is freedom, with which you could move through a fire that’s the queen, with her you can do whatever you desire get people to pray to you, or take a vacation for a day or two but all it takes is one wrong move and its taken away from you then your conscious will be slaying ya brain, replaying the same which represents the two players that are playing the game that seek that called checkmate, which can be life or death one second you think your living the next you realize your dead but while you know your alive, all you can do is hope to survive so gloat for a time, be glad you read this and opened your eyes cause the vision you see may somehow be missing to me since we’re not all pawns just like we’re not the same fish in the sea there are some who cant afford shame and what’s even more lame is what we thought was a game & are bored with is a board game but what if all of this is nothing, who am I to be trusted? I’m he who knows what the difference between here and above is the one who came to bless, Jesus Christ.., he who saved ya necks once slain I left, but first I gave you my word and the game of chess both to equally guide you, to cherish and keep them beside you they‘ll help you find true salvation so I hope you decide to plus if you do life wont be too hard, trust me.., I wont be too far so stop putting pieces together, first find out which piece you are |
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thanks for the feed dudes
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^lol man, Open mic forum here is dead. But i'll drop some feed...
aiight this was pretty tight. I think it'd be much more doper tho if it was audio wise. Cuz the multi's in this are crazy. And flow is fluid all throughout, so just those would of made it an enjoyable read. I thought it was ill how you compared like each piece to what it was like. pretty dope. had some ill metaphors and shit. Real good shit yo. Especially since I love playing chess. dad taught me when I was 5. entered couple of tournaments and shit. Shit's fun, and good strategy and shit. But since I play too i could understand most of the shit you said and enjoyed it more. good shit. some lines that stood out: in the record its said, we’re misled and treacherous heads cause fact is that as kids we learned to play checkers instead haha this was tight. especially since it's pretty true also. made me chuckle there’s no fleeing they’re told, but some hold on deep in their souls cause of rags to riches stories with pawns reaching their goals like this shit, like how Pawns like weakest pieces hence the rags, and their goal is reaching the other side where they can become a Queen hence the riches. good shit at night there’s knights.., the drug addicts, terrorists and felons, see they’re known for L‘s, whether it’s a blunt, suicide or felony another dope one. People who aren't familiar wouldn't understand L part. but I thought this was nice way to describe knight but word this was dope read. keep it up yo. one... |
Aiight here goes...
This was a good piece that was enjoyable to read......your flow and line of length was good so it was easy to read right the way through.....your rhymescheme was good it rhymed nicely.....Vocabulary was good but i felt more complex words could have been used to make the piece more complexed.....there was some imagery which was aiight and your emotion was ok also....Overall decent piece right here no major things wrong so keep up and good job. |
i liked the flow and the whole thing was good im surprised this wasnt a hot topic 4real
keep it up ive heard some of ya shit and it didnt make sense but this was something i enjoyed reading |
up, dont sleep RV.
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This was really good you really put thought into it and it shows very nice wordplay and wording i like how your end rhymes werent hella basic but you combied a few words to make one to rhyme with keep it up. 9.3/10
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this was a well thought out piece shawty, i was feelin it. I like how you compared the pieces in the chess game to the things in life, the whole piece itself was a good metaphor ya feel me.
these were my to fav bars cause the government’s never straight forward with its crooked ways not nice and vicious, just like the Bishop.., which in chess took its place I ain’t saying that its a medal or I’m on some distant level but sometimes I can even see God playing it with the Devil holla at me on my shit wit some feed, be eassy http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234935 |
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