Chosen Ones ENT - Unfinished Business
 

Ok this is definately not our best track, but its a cypher track that shows everyone personality at once.

Just drop your feed cause I'll be posting up new threads for different tracks.

Beat - Clockwork (www.soundclick.com/clockworkbeats.com)

www.myspace.com/waxdatass

1st - Mack Messiah

2nd - Wax (me)

3rd - J Meezie

4th - Half n Half

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...245#post2820245
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233485

*valid feedback*

1st MC - has like no emotion wut so ever.......flow is on point thoe........quality wise u could bring up ur vocals a bit....juss up ya delivery man.........

2nd MC - Better lyrics, delivery is nice..........feelin ya flow man.......quality is nice.......overall pretty good verse....

3rd MC - Nice delivery...ya flow is on point.......lyrics is strate....lol at da "oscar meyer" line......

4th - ahhaah sounds like a white snoop.....flow's on and off........gets back on towards the end......but lacks delivery and emotion like 1st MC....


aiite then...Rtf if ya could: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233473

pz

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thx for the feed...

uppin

damn whats it take to get some feed?

well jeez thanks for the feed guys

yo this site sux when it comes to feed........i mean they think they too good to feed nah mean..but keep leavin feed on otha peeps threads they eventually start postin up fo ya man.........

pz

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maybe you should go leave some more feedback.
you have a rhyme scheme that flows but it doesnt sound all that smooth
and your rhyem scheme could be upped a little bit
2nd guy gotta a grimey typa voice liking your flow better lyrics too you could upp your emotion a little bit though
3rd guy almost osund like triple n and apexx mix lol i like your the verse best so far flow is off a little bit though lol at sucking on myu oscar meyer you jsut ruined it for me : /
omg you sound like my boy quizy but your lyrics arent really that nice flow isnt all that smooth
track was pretty cool nothing id download but its cool

/\/\ Thx - I'm the 2nd cat

2 more links uppin

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233656
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233473

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