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OK, I'm Done
feelings, he doesn’t love to show, but he needs to cuddle though
to soothe & unwind, while losing his mind and his troubles grow his rent for 2 weeks due, as he desperately needs loot with no one to speak to, not even himself since he’s mute he’s vexed indeed, lived a life filled of strife & getting teased if he had hold of one he’d load a gun to his head & squeeze sweating seas, he picks a knife up, stares at his wrist with fright, but his life’s stuck, he thinks how it’ll be after he gives it a nice cut when his blood’ll drip, with which he’ll create a puddle with just the thought of this is about to make him nut or piss he was stuck withholding the wrath, now suicide’s unfolding a path but I’ll stop here cause this type of story’s been told in the past in fifty million ways, stuff that really happened & is insane this we take, as an example of how cold the world is these days there’s no debating, whoever says he has hope is faking God’s aborting this world, only fork in the road is satan’s I’m sure there’s stories you got, of things you seen too gory to jot with like forty to plot, but aren’t you just waiting for me to stop? OK, I'm done.. no wait, I‘m dumb.., today I’ve come to share some things with you I’m from the future and a newer land.., here to bring this news there’ll be a time where visions grew & our greatest wish is true a time when everything’s known, no tricking you or missing clues where religion’s existing barely, with facts bounding missionaries when being in sight, the meaning of life’s found in dictionaries no one’s stuck in despair, no reason to give up when its fair picture a time with kindness and nothing but love in the air so know that we rise, and that our species won’t see demise there’ll be nothing to fear, not even death cause nobody dies but how can this be reaching you?, if even I’m needing proof deceiving you, when I said I was done, I meant speaking truth I gave hope through my fakeness & had all of you guys baited I did come from the future, but that’s the only truth I stated the future is so bad lies keep us sane, we all weep of pain everyone eats the same, you’ll want to die but cant reach the veins thinking of stuff to feed ya brain, till your mind has some friction cause it’s believed lies for so long, it cant tell fact from fiction I swear I’m done, it’s my time.., I’m stuck and I’m blind I don’t even know if I wrote this or made it up in my mind ready to rot in this corpse, time passed & all I’ve gotten is worse plus I just realized I’m the man mentioned at the top of this verse |
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look im in a hurry to post so im gonna be simple, be happy someone gave you feed.
your styles dope, refreshing from this abstract wanna be rhymesayers label emcees bullshit. good multis dope flow. sent a good vibe and dope all the way thru. |
4real your gifted,the stuff you write is the reason i write ,when im not thinking about rapping about being a gangsta or being hard
and when i read the other one it incouraged me to start looking at your other ones and you are gifted when your not being too deep |
YO lama where you from in NY?
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this was a good verse it had good vocab and you stayed on topic nice
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What can i say, it was good. It's hard to keep somethin like that up for so long, but it looks like you had no problem
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Yeah this was pretty good only problem i potentially see is that the lines are too long and it would sound very stretched in audio.
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