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Call It Quits
Im New Here And Just Looking For Some Advice
Im Just Sitting Here Gazing At The Stars/ Looking For My Life's Purpose But I Know Its Not To Far/ I Gotta Find It Soon Before I Make Any Mistakes/ I Already Made So Many That Im Feel Like Im Drowning At The Bottom Of The Lake/ Why? Why Do I Feel This Way?/ What Did I Do To Deserve This Hate?/ It Feels Like Everywhere I Go People Are Always Better/ I Try So Hard That I Cant Try No Harder/ If I Walk To School People Staring Like They Lions And Im Ham/ Is It This Shady Shirt? This Crooked Hat? Who Really Cares I Am Who I Am/ So I Gotta Move Fast, Gotta Perform Miracles/ So I Stay Locked Up In This Room Writting These Syllables/ Im Gonna Make These Kids Feel My Rush/ If You Dont Feel It Then It Must Be To Real To Touch/ This Is It, Last Straw, Thats All, Thats It/ No More Of This, Because I Call It Quits/ |
this was nice if it rhymed a little faster would be a good rap piece right here but as is just poetry needing some vocab but it had good purpose so keep up the good work
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Thanks
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THANKS, YEAH THAT WAS MY FIRST ONE BUT IM FEELIN THE VOCAB, THANKS FOR THE ADVICE ILL REMEBER THAT |
not bad, decent flow, maybe u'r structure could of been better but not a bad verse
I Gotta Find It Soon Before I Make Any Mistakes/ I Already Made So Many That Im Feel Like Im Drowning At The Bottom Of The Lake/ not bad i feel what u saying just get a bit more creative with it an u def be aight fam.... |
RTF an drop some feed on my open mic Feat thesinnister....
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yea im feeling this too,it reminds me of how i feel sometimes keep this up
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