point proven(luciano diss/callout)
 

wrote....produced.......spit....in less than an hour.........
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=4436179
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234545
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3077227
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dont sleep on me rv get at dis ill be glad to rtf asap

ight im feelin the beat freal, flows on point through out the whole thang
had some good lines in there...they not the best but they dope
...feelin the switchup wit the beats..the 2nd beat is ight it more laid back like
u got better punchlines in the second half freal....

u got some good shit here, id bump it more than once defintly

id give this an 8.5/10 not bad

your shit is str8. the quality is nice. Lyrics aint really feeling to much on the first shit. the beats is tight even though your lyrics aint all that coz you got too many wak fillers like "you better duck quick" and a few other wak lines coz you aint had nothing to rhyme with...

your voice sounds kinda gay fam...no hate but the vocal effects you put on it sound a bit rediculouse and yo know that aint your real voice man...ICP is wak dont follow they foot steps if you want to be taken seriouse man.

All in all...this wasn't too bad...a lot better then most other shits Ive heard but with the few quirks I mentioned....2nd beat is sick though. Whose is it?

well just work on your voice and your lyrics, for the most part you just need to use better metaphore and personals and shit when dissing some one. try shit that would get mu fuckas hooked into your shit.

5.5/10 <---and thats not bad so dont get offended...you gotta be 2 pac to get higher then a 8 with me fam.

lol true ight werd but yo no vocal effects dog i sound tha exact same when i spit live.....
but werd thanx for tha feed ill return ta favour on summin of yourz
first beat my mixing went fucked a lil it does sound weird...but yeah second beat is thha exact same as live

yeah...good, you can take criticism...thats rare around here. but if you want, you should just join the audio topical league. then after your 2nd or 3rd battle you can request a grudge match with Luciano if you want.

and dont bother....I dont post my shit up in this section no more. If you want to peep my shit its in the siggy though somewhere.

lol..this made me chuckle

*Heads 2 the Booth*............

been in there for long enough u playin wit cha wet noodle again??

Why you wasting your time? But yeah its good.

"this cat couldn't be dope if he was rolled in a joint"

^dope punchline hahaa, I love ya flow man. Crazy lyrics, I think Luciano will pussy out and cry. You did a pretty good job with this shit, you'll win the battle fa sho if there ever is one. but overall this diss was hot, you got em good with ya punchlines. word nice job man.

rtf here: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...628#post3077628

werd thanx fer tha feed il lhit that up.....

lol @ you using a Tizz beat

thats tight yO!

your voice is kinda annoyingo n this song

You didn't really have any punchlines that stuck out too me

second beat was better for a diss

Lyrics still ehhhh

flow was cool......delivery was better then the flow

this shits AIIIIIGHT.....idk i think luc could take u

lmAO GOOD FEED but does anyone read headlines wasnt abattle.........
an werd my mixing went fucked on tha first beat

you got aim......................?

oh yeahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

rapzalot=aim