Life is Hard
 

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Dear Lord all I ask is u keep me alive
Cus I'm fightin this battle just tryna survive
Nobody knows da hurt and the heat in my heart
I'm so confused I nen backtracked and dunno where to start
Mama gone and it's a sad story to tell
Tryna keep my head up but the devil tryna persue me to hell
God has been good to me and I gotta tell my story
When mama left this world she told me not to worry
So I keep the faith and still I rise
I've been through it all that's why I'm so wise
I've cried many nights and bled deep inside
Feel like my heart been cut deep long and wide
As I strive I steady rise above I've seen no light
I'm blinded on da way this journey is rocky where can I lay?
I've been put down to da ground stomped on my face
But thorugh it all God put me right back in place
I can say I survived the storm of Life
and you wouldnt ever want to obtain my strife

oh thats wassup,i was feeling it
but peep this verse out

people say youll grow out of it but ive been through the worst faise
i pray to god everday and it dont seem like church pays
and everyday im reminded of another year of pain on my bithdays

i spit that spiritual stuff too,i dont only spit fire
leave me feedback on mine

heat 4 tha hatas wiley-d

This is pretty good, slightly basic but with more experience you'll drop better. 6/10.

yea shit was good jus lil basic i feel ya topic though but we been there done dat or still doin through dat holla back n check lyrical hustla peace ma stay up

Umm Gud Piece * I Respect Da Fact U A Female* 7/10 Get At My Piece "misery"

deep still, keep it comin

it was straight...a lil simple...try to improve on yo vocab...
put some multis in there...and try to put a lil wordplay to spice it up

i could feel this doe...get a betta ender too...

6/10

now i was expecting this shit ta be kinda mediocre
but it actually wasnt bad at all i actully got inta it
ur vocab was a lil above average...u used some complexity
but u still could use more compliacted words
the more complicated the more educated u sound (as long as it still makes sense)

flow was actually there..i didnt see a problem wit that
so once again pat yourself on the back...:thumbup:

i'd give this bout a 6/10 (woulda rated it higher but its short as hell)
so thats a good score in my book keep it comming

p.s: leave feed on my new piece
its "girls too much of a hassle" lol i just named it anything
holla back wit some feed back girl pc