RV...............Is it your time? BY...//TonySelf\\
 

just something ive been feeling and shit figured ide give it ago ive responded to numerous tracks we'll see who returns the favor ....
All veres and hooks done by me
beat by ----rhetorical ones beats

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LINKS:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235731
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=236460

Listenin' yeah I know this beat...

I ain't heard you for a minute..

Verse is good soundin a bit like trip, flow is working...delivery is nice I like the slow vibe...lyrics are good...im feeling ya presence and emotion...nice...

I like the hook, is that someone else? if it's you which I think it is sounds nice I like the melody just the voice sound like someone else'

verse 2 like verse 1 liked the switch up with the multis im feeling this track

can you rtf to my song "i see"

Word....I like this version better man.


Hook in the beginning could have benefited from some layering, but I do like how it was like an intro. First verse was dope-a-licious....lol. Actual hook was nice man. I was def feeling that. Second verse could have had the hi's upped a bit. Not really the volume, but the treble. But yeah man, that hook is butter :thumbup:


On a totally unrelated topic, is that the hoopty you were tellin me about?

yea thats me on the hook beleive me i was as surprised as anyone else that i could come like that....haha

this was tight shit yo. and wtf @ bottom car in your pic license plate lookin' like the Connecticutt design? lol

*listening*


..beat is melow..not my taste tho..

...i like the way u came in,when u KINNA sound like triple_n..i like ur flow..pretty cool and steady,you got a decent breathe control..emotion is ok..u sing well,hooks are just cool!..i honestly didnt give ears to the lyrics but i guess they musta been iight!...this is a cool and calm atmosphere on this...its pretty cool!

Word to Tony Sunshine on the track :)

you suprised everybody i think with them Pipes you been hiding nigga... lol....

let me find out you taking singing lessons????

Most deff a breath of fresh air for the boards one time


-Don Tito Bronsky

Listening...

Beat is pretty cool, fitting for the concept.

I really like the flow on this...rides the beat nicely. Lyrics are tight...really makes you think.

That's you on the hook? Lol damn. Soundes like a different person. It's tight though...awesome.

The only thing lacking on this track I thought was the delivery...but perhaps you kept it low for effect on the track.

Good shit man...keep it up. We have to get a collab poppin again sometime.

RTF:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=236476

beat is working

delivery and tone on the track are nice

flow is good

For some reason, lyrics are not sticking in my head...maybe you need a bit more imagery ...burn it in my mind


slick soundin track tho


hook...sounds good



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yo tony can u rtf to my track called "I See" thanks

i got you prah.......

aight thanks bruh

Damn..that hook is ill. Reminds me of City High though. Like the whole feel of the Beat and Chorus gives off a City High type vibe. Which isn't bad.

It's got a real serious feel to it, and the verses could of benefited a little bit more with a little more emotion incoperated. But the hook keeps an emotion through the whole Song that makes me want to listen.

The lyrics are straight, flow is pretty good, Delivery can use a litlte work in the emotion part. But it's pretty ill.

I would bump this track. I still think that hook is ill though.

flow & delivery is nice, presense is good, lyrics is nice, the hook is catchy im liking it, 2nd verse is nice, over-all dope peice man keep it up.


-wOn-

Really Nice To See Kids Given Constructive Criticism I Really Appreciate It Thx