life by jc
 

check it out just quick verse on a bimbi beat.




http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=467016

links are coming

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=236885
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3107125

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=237065

^word you should hit that up for your second link and shittttttt ~_~ i'll peep yours in a bit

Listening...

Beat is pretty basic amateur.

Delivery is very uncomfortable, and very monotonous. Flow is choppy. You need to elevate man...not a bad start, I started worse.

Return the favor on me and Ebirc's song Horror. Thanks.

aiight peepin....

beat in.....

aiight man much better than last track i heard... but like flow don't match beat. For basic flow try to do it so that all the rhymin' words hit the snare, if you know what that is. The like clappin' shit.....well on thsi beat sound more like drum.

also try and up the emotion a bit too yo. Like here it's just monotone. like spit it angry like if you want, like yell a lil.. but word def better than last one I heard man. so step in right direction. keep practicing yo.

oh yea, RTF on my track I linked in first post. wordddd

alot of improvement
flow is robotic
and you sound liek your mumbeling towards the end
jsut need to be more entergetic
and just try to hit the snares liek spul said

uppy my upps.......

Flow & delivery is off, not really riding the beat that great, lyrics are sub-par, i unno man keep elevating, work on ya bar structure for a smoother flow.