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~$Derty$Dee$~ 01-05-07 09:37 PM

Flame Throwing pt1
 
Just a lil something , tell me what u think


I got pain in my soul, Momma’s praying on the low/
My homies backstabbed me for the fame and the dough/
When I commence the system you see flames on the door/
I’m driving the fast lane with rain on the road/
I do big movements similar to Sasquatch/
Give me a chance to grab the mic spit like a mouth wash /
I’m notorious, glorious meritorious you inglorious
Bet your existence mayne, I’ll result victorious/
I got blaze in my essence, gaze at my presence/
My phrases amazes and braces adolescents/
Hip-hop is dead with this download, trying to burn cable/
The only 45 you’ve seen was playing on a turntable/
I’m able, to spray any way slay the prey/
I’m a king you the spades, in the states Dee gon flay/
Is only two cases, me and this danger/
I pack in the coffins, lost the key to the chamber/
I shoot PIG’s, feed of the crime/
I fuck with P08’s and P99’s/
I waste replicas, don’t like all this phony weak thugs/
Dee got more bars and shots than lonely street clubs/


P.M. me two links and I will reopen your thread. Links cannot be over 10 days old.

~$Derty$Dee$~ 01-05-07 10:19 PM

uppin fo feed shit

GREVISS 01-05-07 11:23 PM

your opener was good though i thought you shoud have stayed
on that path, cos for me it just started to get a little to random
through out the verse, and the sasquatch thing, i really was
not feelin that, other than that ya flow and such was pretty
descent, while i dont feel like there was an obvious message
behind this as i thought the ending was to sharp, and just
didnt give a satisfying finisher, overall i think it sill needs a
lil more work , no hate... be easy...peace

~$Derty$Dee$~ 01-06-07 01:27 AM

word, thanx uppin this ish

Young Sin 01-09-07 11:16 AM

Tha opener was good...... but ya flow kinda fell off to me... kinda choppy in places but still nice over all

7/10


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