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Song Cry (first one in a while show love, I will rtf)
Links: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239627
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239642 Title: Song Cry Beat: Song Cry Artist: Chronix Concept: Was a song to my girl. Tellin her that though other guys messed with her and were jerks n shit, I'm not like that n I'ma always be there for her. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=4957501 SHOW LOVE I AINT DROPPED IN A MINUTE! |
listening...heard this beat before...Jay-Z beat if i recall...topic i can relate to...quality is nice...flow is cool...nice slow type vibe...delivery is nice as well...aint heard much from ya but you cool man...1st verse was str8 man
hook...similar to Jays i think... 2nd verse came in nicely...flow is nice still...delivery cool...it's a good track man...feelin it... basically overall...its good man...feelin the lyrics nice and they deep too...like i said i can relate coz my girls had her fair share of arseholes believe me...overall it's a cool track man im sure she'll love it :thumbup plz RTF on the track in my sig (All That) :thumbup: definitely keep droppin man :thumbup: |
Listenin', In my opinion one of the best beats Ive ever heard in my life. I recorded my first ever song to this beat. Memories lol, anyway..I like you're flow, however I think you have too much energy on this, this shit on that calm beat shit..you shud be a lot more calmer on this i.m.o, howevr you know emotion is real...that's the only thing about the song you tryna spit game to you're girl and maybe you wanna be more agressive to show u the realness but shit take a lil more than agressive for this beat you kno?..lyrics are real..and flow is nice..and delivery ive talked about...however as the song goes on I get used to it but still id tone it down a lil bit nah mean brotha?..presence is good you have a good confidence..quality is aight, And im feelin how you tryna talk 2 you're girl and not sound like a pussy nigga nah mean...and if shorty is as real and cool as you be spittin for then be wise wit it, nah mean...you in a good position...anyway this was a good listen, only had prolems with the maybe "too overstressed" delivery..but other than that nice shit..dolla at me
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RTF...
i always like this beat.... JayZ shit no doubt.... waiting for you to kick in.... seems like your too on top of the beat.... like your not givin the beat enough room to breath or something.... Track is very personal.... nice lil tribute to a female.... but the bar structure and delivery... is hard to compare.... like you know how they say on American Idol... song choice... and shit... its kinda the same thing... like... i know what the track sounded like... wit J on it... so its hard for some one else to tackle this and if they do... they gotta do it better or as good.... this was a fair attempt though.. no hate.... none at all 7.5/10 the production was smooth ... juss the delivery and way you attacked certain parts of the track seemed a bit lack luster... other than that ... it was straight :) |
i was feeling this but ,when i did this i killed it , i think it was 7.5 like the other nigga said
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I like the beat and you fit it well...the first verse was good, lyrics were good and deep...the delivery was good but kind of mechinical but it wasnt that big of a deal.
hook was good, it didnt stand out as well as id like but its good none the less... 2nd verse was good, stood with the first, the flow was a lil better than the first verse, lyrics were good once again... 3rd verse good as the other 2...im feelin' the song man...lyrics were nice and deep and the song is about something a lot of people can relate to...overall good drop man i'll look out for more tracks... |
OK...Jay Z joint...I don't like people using famous beats to make serious songs...It's a rip off...if u were jus toyin around, it wudn't be a problem IMO...
Why? Cuz all I think about is the original artist, unless you come with pure fire. Your flow is decent on here...presence is felt...emotion/lyrics fit the tone of the track... not bad bro...But, not Jay Z by far. 1 |
man, stop cakin nigga lol
ight mayne, this beat is okay, i wasn ever retarded on it, but it's good enough to transmit what you wanna say. shoulda had a little more blab in the intro over the harmonics. ok still translating "emotion" in the deliv as "shouting". shoulda taken it down a level or two. the first verse was good had content, the deliv made the overall feel seem segmented you know, splitting the sentences and specifically the words to the next bar. the second verse was more melodic, still woulda liked to hear it not shouted or deliv'd at a lower vol. think perfect groupie. the ender on the second verse should have had more of a comprehensive impact and let em come away with somethin ya know? third verse was on point, sounded liek you finally came down a level by verse 3, had content, verse sounded short like an 8 or 12 bar. might not have been a bad idea to do all 3 verse liek that. damn wtf the song just shut down? come on man you know you gota ride that one out, let the beat walk it out after you drop some smooth talk lol. not bad man overall man, i mean you knew what you got 100 |
not a song to raise your voice on like you did....you gotta drop it an octive n make it sound more sincere......n like tito said slowwww down a bit n let what your sayin resonate....thas what you gotta do with these loves songs....cuz the ladies your rappin too, dont pick shit up as quick as everyone...ya know? good flow n all tho....jus work on matching the right flow scheme n vocal octive to the right beat.....
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thanx for the feed everyone um, the song ended early cuz soundclick cut it down cuz it was too big i think. i'll take y'all advice bout matching my voice to the content more. good lookin
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