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DaTrusHurtz 04-05-07 01:09 PM

27. Ghunz (0-0) vs. 28. Keyed (0-0)
 
G.B.A
Gimmick Battle Association


Celebrity Rapper Battles

Pretend as if you ARE the rapper you have been assigned. Don't diss your opponent, diss your opponent's rapper. Bring out the personals and the heat. Good Luck.

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Ghunz as Jibbs

vs.

Keyed as Young Buck


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Verses Due Monday at 12:00PM Pacific
10 Line Minimum, No Line Limit
Biting = Ban
Feeding = -2 Votes
Swaying = DQ
Must Vote On 4 Battles And Post Your Links
Votes Due Wednesday Night
New Battles Up Thursday Morning
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Ghunz 04-05-07 05:02 PM

ehhhh 10................................

Keyed 04-07-07 11:58 AM

Lol, okay then. 10? I'll go what I can.

Keyed 04-09-07 09:22 PM

straight outta cashville, nigga you heard? everybody say I'm the bomb
but tell me how you gon' make the song King Kong 'n not dedicate it to your mom
yeah I seen the bitch and she hairy, and I'll turn her into a new fur coat
and yeah I get it, your chain hang low....but your dick sure don't
you can get buck with any music, as long as its good then just go along
so tell me why it seems that NOBODY ever gets buck to your songs?
and people just rock to yo shit, they don't even know what they playin'
see I have a southern accent too, but people still understand what I'm sayin'
but what am I botherin' with you for, you couldn't even get into G-Unit
but I wish I could be just like you...so people wouldn't ask me to make music

10.

Keyed 04-10-07 03:06 PM

I win? How about some feed?

DaTrusHurtz 04-11-07 04:22 PM

Aight, here's your feed

straight outta cashville, nigga you heard? everybody say I'm the bomb
but tell me how you gon' make the song King Kong 'n not dedicate it to your mom
lol, i liked this line. Most mom jokes like this don't turn out well, but I really liked this one
yeah I seen the bitch and she hairy, and I'll turn her into a new fur coat
and yeah I get it, your chain hang low....but your dick sure don't
nahh, this was kinda too obvious and came off as gay
you can get buck with any music, as long as its good then just go along
so tell me why it seems that NOBODY ever gets buck to your songs?
This was wayy too simple. I wouldn't have used this line, but if I had, I woulda done it like a recall. A recall punch is when u say a phrase in a setup with one meaning n' then in the punchline use the same phrase word for word, but with a different meaning.. not sure if this is great, but somethin' like this:

I get buck naked with bitches when i glance at the hoes
U also get buck... like, AT BEST...1 or 2 fans at your shows

and people just rock to yo shit, they don't even know what they playin'
see I have a southern accent too, but people still understand what I'm sayin'
concept here is fine, but its too simple the way ya executed it, theres no wit. Try combining a cliche or some sort of wordplay with this personal to make it hit better. Even if u had said "We BOTH have southern accents... difference is, people actually get what i'm sayin'" that woulda been better, but this could be improved even more by some creative wit
but what am I botherin' with you for, you couldn't even get into G-Unit
but I wish I could be just like you...so people wouldn't ask me to make music
nah, this was stupid. Why wouldn't u want people asking u to make music?

Opener was strong, but u fell off after that. Some decent concepts, some were eh, just work on using more wit with your execution.

bobericc_lyrics 04-11-07 04:38 PM

straight outta cashville, nigga you heard? everybody say I'm the bomb
but tell me how you gon' make the song King Kong 'n not dedicate it to your mom
lol, coo^^
yeah I seen the bitch and she hairy, and I'll turn her into a new fur coat
and yeah I get it, your chain hang low....but your dick sure don't
ok..^^
you can get buck with any music, as long as its good then just go along
so tell me why it seems that NOBODY ever gets buck to your songs?
meh^^
and people just rock to yo shit, they don't even know what they playin'
see I have a southern accent too, but people still understand what I'm sayin'
ok^^
but what am I botherin' with you for, you couldn't even get into G-Unit
but I wish I could be just like you...so people wouldn't ask me to make music
too much self glory, but ok^^

coo verse this week key.. some decent punches. i liked the first wordplay the best too.. it had a nice personals wording to it which is nice to have in a punch. keep it up then son and u just might climb these ranks easy

DaTrusHurtz 04-12-07 07:01 PM

Ghunz no-shows, even though he was online and could have dropped

Keyed WINS 1-0
Ghunz NO-SHOWS 0-1


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