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Gestures (0-0) vs TonyTone (0-0)
Write Away Your Thought Week One Matchup Gestures (0-0) vs TonyTone (0-0) Ok guys, we didn't have many people show for the preseason, but it is ok because the battles didn't count, and I can understand about the time restraints. Moving on, this week will count on your season record, so make every line you type, worthy of everyone's time. Please try your best to show, and if you need an extension (for whatever reason). Contact me through PM, or AIM (JonathonIsGod). If extension is granted, it will be no longer than 24 hours. Good luck to both, write hard, and try your best! Verse's Due: April 13, Friday Battles Close: April 15, Sunday Please try your best to vote on three battles. Leave links in your check. List of Topics Rules & Regulations Good luck! |
checkers and chess
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I know this sucks, but this my first topical/poetry shit ever ...so cut me sum slack <3 :love:
My minds gone wild, and its a strange feeling Like if you were hanging upside down from the ceiling Letting all the blood drain into your brain And cant think straight, so all your thoughts get slain Nothings the same, and everything changes You start seeing monsters instead of the faces Teeth grinding, and jaws turning sore I wanna make sense, but nothing else does anymore A life where your outsmarted by a child Well thats what happens when your mind goes wild |
lmao check......
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Level Plane
They say it's all balanced out and Constitutionalized But how is that a fact, mayne when pollution is high I gotta pay more, the rich go free, we go broke So low, now we gotta give up n smoke dope That's a no go, they say we can say whatever N then they say "slander, get in jail you heffer" Now you screwed forever, can't ever get a nine ta five Cuz you caught up gotta take it tryna make it alive See that'll never be me, i got other plans Gonna man up, then beat the man wit teeth n hands Wouldn't wanna put my kids through bull shit But life ain't fair so i let off a full clip ......10 minutes :) |
ima vote gestures here cuz i just liked his better
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^^^nice explanation /sarcasm
anyway, sorry bout the bull shit verse. im outta town right now and didn't think i'd have computer access while i was away |
I am going to have to vote TonyTone on this one... It could have gone Gestures' way had he developed his verse more, but it seems like it lacks depth. Tony's, although it was a quick verse, had the same sort of emotional "vibe", but instead of just leaving it at that, his verse had a kind of initial problem, a further complication and then came to a conclusion. Gestures' verse seemed like it talked about the initial problem the whole time. Know what I mean?
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Nobody knows wtf your talkin about!^^ lol
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tony gets my vote here.....his wriiten verse was more on a complexed level and was more shown for creativity and foreground wording was nicely done man. his story and whole standard point was straight and got across even with a short piece gestures you did a nice topical drop but it was lacking a schemed story and a well used wording profession y aknow....it was creative but it felt like you were tryna sound smart not write so..
V/Tony |
blah hum-bug i could care less, my first ever topical shit lol so its all good.
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Closed. TonyTone (1-0) beats Gestures (0-1)
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