Week 2: Jay 3rd 0-0 .vs. Jonny Hustle 0-0
 

check check

i'll crush ya beliefs and smoke-ya-faith-in-a-joint//
chop off ya left nut so ya dick like an exclamation point//

That's the best you can do? Make a lame joke on my dick?
I'll have this faggot feelin more pain that the lame quote in his sig.
Take notes and be quick. I'm the truth. Peep everything this vets doin'.
As for yourself? You're a bigger disappointment than the Virginia Tech shootin.

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bitch i'll crush ya body and even stomp ya shodow//
and u aint shit dawg that why K Stubbs Forgot ya battle//

i'll crush ya beliefs and smoke-ya-faith-in-a-joint//
chop off ya left nut so ya dick like an exclamation point//
...kinda funny, i dont think that really makes any sense
bitch i'll crush ya body and even stomp ya shodow//
and u aint shit dawg that why K Stubbs Forgot ya battle//
this is a personal but no wordplay and not a good lead in to make it hit hard
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That's the best you can do? Make a lame joke on my dick?
I'll have this faggot feelin more pain that the lame quote in his sig.
.. i just read his sig before i read this and i was thinkin how gay it was, so i liked this
Take notes and be quick. I'm the truth. Peep everything this vets doin'.
As for yourself? You're a bigger disappointment than the Virginia Tech shootin.
..i think mine was better cuz it had wordplay, and i dont think people were disappointed about the shooting they were saddened, so i dont think that made much sense either.

vote- hustle, more consistent and knows how to word a punch better

Jonny-Not bad, overall you got good concepts....your not wording them terribly, overall i think your rhyme scheme is good. Both punches were effective. Couldn't really pin out which one was better. overall good job

Jay-You got a great rhyme scheme man. good multis. but wording your punches is whats killing you. They're leanin more towards statements rather then punches. Although the 2nd bar made me laugh. i'd have to give it to.


V/jonny

v. jonny for coming with 2 decent bars, instead of one decent and one not so decent...consistancy doesn't always win battles..but in this case it did..because neither of you had punchlines that stood out from the rest.....good work though

neitha of jays punches were good. 1st one was jus a weak concept, the way u worked it didn't make much sense and it was neva ganna b hard neway. 2nd had potential as a personal, but the way u worked it was jus bland.


tbh i wasn't feeling johnny much eitha. opener was a sig punch, not much creativity there. 2nd was a virginia tech line, which has quickly become played as hell. urs jus doesn't set itself apart from all the rest, too simple.


but, i've got johnny takin this 1 for being more polished at this stage.


v/johnny hustle

Jonny Wins 1-0
Jay 3rd Loses 0-1