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Chris Stylez (0-1) VS. L.E. (0-1) vs. Exact (0-0)
Write Away Your Thoughts Week 3 Chris Stylez (0-1) vs LE (0-1) vs. Exact (0-0) Ok, this week, we have started a Champ and Contender match. Those of you who are not in the champ or contender match, prove yourselves worthy and work your way up. Remember, the prize is 100 dollars, and there are some other prizes as well. If you no-show, you will be booted, from now on that is the rule. Invite your friends as well, help expand our league. Don't leave all the work for the mods to do, we really need your help too! Well, good luck this week guys, keep up the tempo, and outwrite your opponent! This will be the only free verse week you got, so make it good! (Free verse week, write what you want, any topic, just write.) Rules Good Luck! |
Check. foreverandeverandever.
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Checking in.
I completely forgot last week lol. -Your are forgive my love dont do it again or i shall bitch slap you! Mr.Write |
Ten Thousand Men
Trumpets begin to shatter the hills with lust Rain pounces upon stones, steel, and the dust Thunder cracks, lighting blinks into air in silence The wind crashes, branches bending in defiance Ten thousand blades ring from ten thousand sheathes Ten thousand feet marching through a million leaves Ten thousand souls following only one man's lead Ten thousand rejoice, or ten thousand will weep Ten thousand men meet ten thousand men Ten thousand as one, never seen again Twenty thousand sound, twenty thousand cry Ten thousand will die, ten thousand survive Five thousand a side, ten thousand will clash Five thousand more will be dead on their backs Ten thousand souls following only one man's lead Ten thousand rejoice, or ten thousand will weep Twenty thousand there was, five thousand remain A quarter host for each, and nothing will change Trumpets still sound, the hills covered in red How many fathers lay in them, how many dead? Two and a half thousand now stand on for all And still they slash on, every man will stand tall Twenty thousand men, they all followed one... ...But ten thousand minus ten thousand still equals none... |
Damn... Im (0-1) in a league i just found out I was apart of today....That has to be a first but anyways check
you asked to be and i pm'd you saying to check in cus you hada match last week so..... -Mr.Write |
Thats was like 2 weeks ago...u pmed me to be in this league...till that PM...i havent even been on RV for like a month....so i came back a bit you offered me a leaque so i joined...then didnt hear nothin from ya for like 2 weeks so..........
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Sin City
I’m looking for – over exaggerated puns with warm handled guns, I’m looking for waterlogged clips and overused clits, Well are you looking for fun? Yes, sir – just a bit – You came to the right place, you know how those females get. Well – actually I don’t, expand on that topic – I’m looking for pineapple drinks and cool breeze tropics – Marvelous travels, females are absolutely gorgeous – they’re a nice size and their knockers are enormous! And about that tropical drink suggestion – let me ask you a question – when you say pineapple drinks, how’s about a brewsky at the bar? We’ll set you up with a real nice car, reason with a capital R. That sounds great, is this a timeshare opportunity? Do I have the same rights as others, or foreign immunity? Well I can’t insure safety just that you make it there safely, so if you’d just sign your name to this paper I’d appreciate it greatly. Alright sir, is there a rush Mr. Bailey? Of course not, I didn’t mean to caress you the wrong way, it’s just that I’ve been antsy to get home, it’s been a long day.. I understand, would you happen to have a pen? MeAnWhIlE Mr BaIlEy lOoKeD aS iF hE cOuLdN’t WaIt FoR tHe SeSsIoN tO eNd. Yes, sure sir, sign here – and here and here, sign at the red X – insurance if you break your neck. Just as Seymour Butts signed the contract Sin Cityit looked as if Mr. Bailey just about had a heart attack, He shuffled the papers into a briefcase – and quickly exited the door, He’d rather take the stairs, he was on the 12th floor, Flashing blue and red – aching his retinas and forming pain in his head, He was lost – but jogged because he knew what it would cost if they got him. He shuffled to the right of the entrance into the parking garage – he nearly dropped his briefcase trying to give his temples a massage, Just as Mr. Bailey reached for the handle – hoping not to trip the alarm, It sacred him to death as a bullet hit his arm, “Don’t shoot!” he exclaimed gingerly favoring the arm that was wounded, He knew that he was caught, his plan was ruined, He had tried to sell a man a timeshare to the ruins, To play with the concrete monsters and bruins, As he yelled, don’t shoot, the bullets riddled his body, The police remained shooting ever so calmly, Just before he died the demons had come for him, He thought he could live low, they would just ignore him, His eyes caught a final glance of what they could see, The patch on the officers’ arms read Sin City PD.  |
Exact takes the win to me...he was more aggressive with his take on the topic...more creative read and was more wonderous with things in spite poetry vs. topical...here... nice shit guys and thanks for showing up....i was just more into EXACTS piece...it was more COMPLETE and ALL AROUND LE your verse was a nice read man i liked it but when i saw EX's verse and read it thoroughly i had my mind change decisions quickly cus he coered his piece with originality all over it!
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v/ Exact.
I really did read, but I am just making votes on the battles. I DID READ THE VERSES! I just don't want to leave feed, because it takes too long. But please understand that I do vote fairly and unbiased. PM me if you have a problem with this vote, I will straighten it out and just explain to you later why I voted for who I voted for. |
V/ Exact
Your piece was more aggressive, more intriguing to read than L.E. I liked the introduction of the story, and when the events got wild, you changed the story to the right side of the post in bold. Creative... nice piece L.E.: Your piece was decent, but Exact just had the better piece this time. Yours was more poetic, his was more of a topical. Not saying theres anything wrong with being poetic, but if you are, you have to put work harder for the win. More emotion, more content, more complexed lines that makes the reader think. Good job tho |
Exact wins
Chris Stylez (0-2) L.E. (0-2) Exact (1-0) |
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