lyrically one of the best hit singles ever!
 

hello i'm don cardyac and here is the lyrics to my hit single from my "payaboy" mixtape.

(chorus)x2
they call me paypa boy cuz i deliver the news, get word or it
i ain't a rapper mo, i'm more like a journalist
tryna live through everything that i recieve as i pen
restart the presses i'm relievin' again

who want's some? you want none, bum
i'll queensbridge,NY slang 'em, get it? get'cha son done(dun)
young took one, no real gunz y'all pump fake
i get INTOXICATING amounts of MONEY get it? RUM CAKE
tastin'victory so sweet till my tum aches
but some hate, the dumb wait, for small change, thats crumb cake
spit fire like i inhaled in hell till my lounges baked
so SHOOK to EARTH me when you RAP till your TOUNGE QUAKES
if you can't FEEL what i say that your body's NUMB
somebody's girl wants my body so there man, i'll body them
i COME HARD, don't get it confused with those who HARDly COME
cuz the STRIP i RUN is where most haters STRIP & RUN
not for entertainment tho, they get there clothes
stripped off 'em & sold, back to youngin's that live on there row
they say they GO HARD but if it gets HARD they'd prolly GO
its paypa boy aka DON CARDY, MO!

thats just the 1st verse but check how i would take 2 words and reuse them differently in the same line. i don't know what kind of wordplay that is but its some new s*** i've started. after i worte it coincidently some artist like consequence and lil wayne have done it also but very rarely so i'm owning this concept cuz i started doin' it b4 i ever saw them try it. they could've donte it by accident and aint even notice tho. things like that happen when your a lyricist. i'm still creating new wordplay and punchline styles so i'll be back killing it. please try making up new styles too cuz it will make hiphop a lot more interesting that that same ol BS that we hear on the radio everyday.

srry for the poor spelling in that paragraph, i was rushin'.

it was iight nothing really stand out to me... maybe if you tried to explain ya punches they'll be more understandable

thanks for the feed. i dont like to do that cuz its soo many ways to see my lines. like when i write they are always in metaphors so even the basic sounding lines have alterior meanings when you really look at 'em. but i'll try doing that next time.

here's a tip, keep your eyes on the capitalized words than it'll make it easier to see the metaphor and wordplay but even then some times there even more than 2 meanings but it'll atleast help you see one.

a lotta youngins ain't ready for my hard tangled grammar-killa cam

dude I know wut to look for homie... I'm tryin to help you out... that's my form of rappin in text when I do a written........ homie trust me I know wuts up... just listen to me doggie

word i got'chu thanks i'm a try it next time. i need good advise ery once in a while cuz yes men annoy me.

there are some MADD typos in there... but w/e overall... nuttin really stood out.. some good lines and multies and some metas were good. others were ehhh... but over all this like a 6.5 - 7/10.

nice...but im seeing what young said.....if u had put more meaning in these punches others would understand what u were trying to get at.... some punches i was reading and i got more than one meaning for them...one of the lines with a punch was a little off to me...keep doing what u do...~1~