Goodbye ...(my best track ever) ill RTF
 

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=454969

Beat: Anno Domini
Lyrics: Me
Recorded at my place


my best song IMO


Left feed on Elrey's song hip hop is dead news

Left feed on Black Magic's Lost

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why would you intruduce yourself?.. if the song is called goodbye?.. lol
iight ne wayz...

beat is pretty dope....

verse one, flowed is on point for sure, quality sounds pretty dope...., had some niice rhymes in there and good emotion.

verse two, good emotion in this verse, man I wish I could have got in a verse for this track, but yeah it flowed good again.....

hook: speats is singin' yeye'.. haha, pretty decent.

overall song: 7/10, its dope man for sure, get at me for a collabo real soon homie, stay up!


rtf:
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=242071

i fele the intro introduce ya self to people that u dont kno and syain bye...
Beat is sick man..
Good Emotional Flow ya got there man... Lyrics is felt man...
verse 2 ... some deep shit man actually feelin the emotion...
the singin could of been better and messed with more.. i'm feelin this track alot man..i make a lot of life tracks too...
8/10 good shit man
RTF http://community.rapverse.com/showt...857#post3166857

introduce myself? yeah kinda sounds weird

aint heard u in a while..i like the beat so far...


i honestly started laughing when your voice first kicked in..your accent is kinda annoying at times..flow is basically on point..

your breathing is way too loud..it sounds like your suffocating and your gasping for air..work on that

empty space..bores me..do something with that so we know youre coming back in.

lyrically its pretty cool..nothing special.

is this the hook? nah dont like it..or the end whatever part the singin was.



there was no fluctuation or anything in your voice so it sounded kinda weird being the same tone all the way through.

intros attention grabbing.
Apmlify your breaths -15 brother, will make the entire track sound alot better. Emotions cool, but to me them breaths are wrecking it. That first is cool. I think this is the hook now, not feeling the flow after the beats break down, its slightly off and in parts it come through very rushed.
Damn get rid a them breaths brother!!!

Oh k now the hook, that singing could be alot better, but i cant hardly hear what your saying, the EQ on singing is alot diffrent to rapping, sounds like you need less Lows and alot more hi's on that singing.
oh, um , ok tracks ended, i guess that would be a solid track to go out on a Cd with.

Overall its cool, just a few things that need adjusting.

absolutely sound like a fag wit that lame accent..
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works for the chorus though

LOL ur voice isnt appealin at all to me it sounds superficial.....i dunno the beat is coo but i couldnt vibe wit this cuz i aint felin the voice delivery is medocre and so is the flow it seems reppitious....i like the concept and everything but i think u kinda came off like ur puttin up a facade..maybe its the accent....overall pretty decent keep doin ur thing homie =1=

damn i remember speatz beats...this is a big step up

intro-nice
verse 1-lyrics is on point, flow is ok...good emotion,
i actually like the gap between verses
verse 2-flow isnt as good as first verse...nice lyrics, can relate...again good emotion and vocab
i like the outtro singin

overall i liked hte emotion and vibe of this track, i also liked the way it was set up...nice job man

rtf
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=242282

atleast his vocals work on one part on the track, rather then none.

Ill Rtf tomorow or tonight Thanks for the feed

Feelin the beat so far............

ya flow is on for most parts........but ya delivery is like a whining voice.....and it's kinda annoyin.....i understand ya comin wit some emo shit on this track but u sound like u seriously cryin and u tryin to rap.......but ya quality is nice......lyrics are strate for this type of track........hook is peaking wit the quality....not really feelin it.......yo man keep droppen.....

pz

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Hook is is on the verge of bein catchy and the basis of this song but the quality / mix is gettin in the way.

Your accent ppl just aint use to it. It didnt throw me off that much you do need to work on breath control. emotion is good tell you felt this when you wrote it ... Try recording 2 bars at a time or stoppin for air and punchin back in ..