Balled UP FT. Du kay (((FIRE!!!)))
 

chorus- Du kay on the singin Big Picture on the rest
first verse- Du kay
second verse- Big Picture
third first 1/2- Big Picture
third second 1/2- Du Kay
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first song that plays on my myspace(Balled UP), link in sig and also...
http://www.myspace.com/marktimothyschafer
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wow @ your links dating back about a week..

that laugh thing is lame...HAHAHA @ your "gun" sounds..stop it seriously

the hook..it works. pretty good. just the "get em up" sounds weird.


verse 1 - quality is okay..too much pop though. lyrics suck. but for this song you dont need the greatest lyrics..flow is ok..its just the same throughout so its kinda boring

hook same as i said before

verse 2 - flow is a lot better than before..emotion is pretty good..dont sound as monotonous as u did before. that rich boy line was pretty lame. and u sound way too far away from the mic.

first verse aint me yo, thats my friend. i got the second and begining of the third. but werd, i gotta like have my lips touchin the mic to not sound like that i guess cuz im bout two inches away. and how bout that "i steal so much, i beat the grinch to the who's christmas" line eh eh? haha

Returning, the backround vocasl got that original bone sound to it, i like it. Personally I wouldnt use a beat like this.

First verse reminds me of hustle and flow guy... woop that trick get em!!!!
Lyrics are simple but its a commercial track so I guess thats the reason. Second verse is nice and clear, could do with less mids in your EQ and maybe a diffrent compression. Even though the hooks nothing great I like it, the backround vocals are a nice touch to it.

3rd verse again reminds me that cat from hustle and flow.

Infact this entire track reminds me of the tracks of that movie, I guess its the raw underground attempt at some commercial shit.

overall its all good.

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Oh wait, the outro is weird as fuck, wrecked the track IMO.


Note: After I stopped playing this track the girls thats here was singing the backround vocals.

lol at the muhahaHAHA made me laugh.....dont do the gun noises again....ur flow is aight but i dunno if i like the delivery or the voice....hook fits ight.....the next dude reminds me of someone on this forum......overall this was a decent.....keep doin ur thang homie....

yeah the intro and the outro is just a joke. no thought or seriousness went into either, we was just drunk and thought it sounded funny. but yo enstinctz, i sound like someone else on this forum or am i the one u think i sound like? idk. and yo "?." we had a bunch of girls singin that junk last night so that was funny u said that.
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thanx ya'll for the feed, i'll be checkin for your ish. like enstinctz cali summa, diggin that.

now i remember ...u kinda sound like zone out...jus a lil bit lol.....

he sounds funny, if u sure u got me right on the track, im second verse. but we both from michigan, so maybe that has sumin to do wit it.

i like the chanting at the beg...the get em up.....yea i like the hook, but the first verse lacks the emotion needed to make it a hit....the quality is very hallow on the second guy...he sounds like he stood 20 ft from the mic....the 3rd was blah....yea i like the hook i hate the verses....you shoulda done so much better with this.....kinda disapointed...

listenin...
intro is good i like it, kidna bone thuggish
verse 1-good flow, emotion and shit...only thing that might need work is lyrics, throw in at least 1-4 punchlines in that shit
chorus-nice
verse 2-flow is iite, mainstream as hell so of course lyrics need a lil work...still not bad tho, original flow in a few spots
verse 3-best lyrics by far...decent flow but prolly needs more emotion

just fix up the quality yall

rtf
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