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trizzoy 07-05-07 02:41 AM

a blur
 
hi this is my first post
jus sumthin i wrote recently



i feel that im wrapped, my thoughts arent strapped
i came with a mask, jus to get the last laugh
right now im lively, they tried to deprive me
of who i really am, but i thank you kindly
i walk too brightly, dark shadows inside me
you couldn't see it if u brought the sun down beside me
i'll put it to u lightly, don't strive to revise me
aspire and i i'll award you silence, now proceed on quietly
i was born with a weakness, unaaware of the pain it brings
all i want is freedom, but why does the caged bird sing?
i have no positive decisions, whether its fact or opiniion
one little incision could blur the view of my vision
and im not kiddin, my genuine ideas are hidden
thats the aftermath wen we all try to fit in
now im forbidden, to unleash my inner villain
stricken with despise in disguise to fool the creator's eyes
i talk with size, but now its time for me to conceive
my virtuous past leads to my high expectancies
and boldly, i wont deny that im a hypocrite
sometimes i speak without thought, and can't commit to it
but im not the only misfit, wen it comes to confusion
we all tend to lose a battle to these illusions

trizzoy 07-05-07 02:42 AM

links
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=3174610
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=3174611

deluzional 07-05-07 02:45 AM

damm nice one mangg. sum parts are kinda idk, but mostly it was really good. you had really nice wordplay i think. im feelin dis alot man 7/10. keep writing homboi. youl be really good.

KM 07-07-07 09:23 PM

real nice....i understand what u saying.....topic was on point....keep writing man ~1~

MOB 07-24-07 06:23 PM

Really nice i wanna see sum more shit like this it was really impressive!

Lil White 07-29-07 03:24 AM

this was good..you where right to the point


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