new shit
 

im runnin amuk,in a stolen black truck,got 2 pistols tucked,been wild since a young buck,murder,mayhem dats wuts up,2 middle fingers in da air screamin i dont give a fuck,life sucks deal with it,yea i keep it trill,u kno u feelin it,got 1 hell of a grip,on this thang on my hip,cocked,and aimed ready 2 spallter ya lips,if u run up talkin dat shit,its a must u get ya dome split,and send ya home quick,have ya face on the front page of a gazette,now for ya people who r average,dats newspaper ya bastards,im comin causin disasters,fester up quick,wit sum symplistic shit dat'll make rapverse panic,and call me an amature bitch,but im big screen ya'll still doin amature flicks,i kick shit,explicit,when i spit this,i persist,and resist givin up,cuz i aint eva givin up,til i breathe my las breath,call me a readers diagest,cuz they all wanna follow up so call me the doctor,,i serve choppers,wit bullets the size of whoppers lets see if u can digest steal,when im straped,these gats they peel,like bananna's and cause shock like a eel,so chill,wit that fake gangsta rap shit 4 u get killed//

more 2 come

here's my link's:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188704

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243144

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243039

eh hmmmm....not bad for an off the top....had some good wordplay....thats about it though....seems like u rushed this and did it super quick.....~1~

I Agree with KM...It Does Seem Like This Was Really Rushed....But The Wordplay Was Cool At Times....But Besides That Everything Else Seemed Kinda Forced But It Was OK...100

ayt ya'll got me i rushed it but hey hadda post sumtin and been runnin on e but thanx 4 the comments

it was good for a off the top

thanx 4 the comment people leave me links so i can reply back peace

hmm, not bad i guess, seems more like a freestyle, it was hard to read as well... simple piece, but i guess if this is your style, its not bad... i'm not really into this kinda scene, with running around with guns blat blat n shit.. but keep writing,

lol nice bar germ lol of course all my judges guys so that shit outta the question fucka that...ill jus do the prosecutor she a hot blonde..lol thanx 4 the feed peeps check out lyrical hustla

this is Ok @ best. Seen as this is text you should try structure your shit rather than write it like a novel. lol.

Overall it seems effortless bro. Would like to see you sit down and put alot of time and effort into something worth reading.
keep up.

hmm every1 else thought it was fine jus a lil rushed oh well thanx 4 your feed peace