somethin i did in class....
 

im a basic rappist on raps daily basis.
aint affriad of change since the death of our nation.
my flow? outrages pages and words with a backthrow.
i packslow to rackmore attacks then a track show.
i pack man... so call me the rap pac-man.
i got pac-raps, rap packs, i write rap with a pac-hand.
do u understand? i attack rap with a rap hand.
i trap rap in rap traps like rats in a cats hand.
got no time for u haters, players and any other fakers.
im hustlen on this grind and out here grindin for that paper.
ill obliverate any attempts of slaughtering rhymes.
im a ghost writter but i still write all of my lines.
its clobberin time, im grabbin a hammer and hammering.
your temple and damaging braincells untill ur left no longer standing.
comprehend the understanding, im way better then yall.
see cus u aint understanding me, but im clearly understanding yall.
u got one mission, one vision, one life and a chance to listen.
your life will be one lost, with no vision to gitt it.
ill run in like a kingpin and kick u harder then a pigskin.
make u do 20 backflips over 100 napkins and watch u land in a shitbin.
ill fade out like i fade in,in a minute u will become a deaf-mute.
u cant compute the flow that electrocute, man im absolute.
i dont undershoot, i over shoot, and blow up ur computer.
hittin u with rhymes comin quicker and sharper then a sharpshooter.
to me there is no substatution, im achieved absolution.
im the evolution of lucian carrying out your execution.
some think they a wiseguy. but im here just to notify
i fortified my rhymes so i terrify fools makin'em look cockshy.
i amplified my rhymes so now the can electrify.
i can disqualify ne fool and have there hole flow in a tounge tie.
u bout to pass the borderline, ill push back ur headline.
ur jawline ur life line for wut i call a very long time.
my flow straighter then a base-line. yours slowly declines.
u an underground baby, fool i fly high like an airlines.
the bottem line is my flow upbeat, yea its sweet.
take a seat, grab a treat, let me preheat my fist while i cook up ur reciet....

ok kinda has no meanin.. did it in class.. just a bunch of multies.
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alot of wordplay u had....nice ...just like your other posts before this one....not really much to say sept work on spelling lolz.....still good though....stay up ~1~

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3184638
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=244091

lotta multis and inners.... a lil drunk but bear with me


im a basic rappist on raps daily basis.
aint affriad of change since the death of our nation.
my flow? outrages pages and words with a backthrow.
i packslow to rackmore attacks then a track show.
i pack man... so call me the rap pac-man.
i got pac-raps, rap packs, i write rap with a pac-hand.
do u understand? i attack rap with a rap hand.
i trap rap in rap traps like rats in a cats hand.
(it all makes sense tho...lol nice multis and a lil wordplay here)
got no time for u haters, players and any other fakers.
im hustlen on this grind and out here grindin for that paper.
ill obliverate any attempts of slaughtering rhymes.
im a ghost writter but i still write all of my lines.
its clobberin time, im grabbin a hammer and hammering.
your temple and damaging braincells untill ur left no longer standing.
(coo)
comprehend the understanding, im way better then yall.
see cus u aint understanding me, but im clearly understanding yall.
(lol k)
u got one mission, one vision, one life and a chance to listen.
your life will be one lost, with no vision to gitt it.
ill run in like a kingpin and kick u harder then a pigskin.
make u do 20 backflips over 100 napkins and watch u land in a shitbin.
(wow ok)
ill fade out like i fade in,in a minute u will become a deaf-mute.
u cant compute the flow that electrocute, man im absolute.
i dont undershoot, i over shoot, and blow up ur computer.
hittin u with rhymes comin quicker and sharper then a sharpshooter.
to me there is no substatution, im achieved absolution.
im the evolution of lucian carrying out your execution.
some think they a wiseguy. but im here just to notify
i fortified my rhymes so i terrify fools makin'em look cockshy.
i amplified my rhymes so now the can electrify.
i can disqualify ne fool and have there hole flow in a tounge tie.
u bout to pass the borderline, ill push back ur headline.
ur jawline ur life line for wut i call a very long time.
(i like the line concept u had goin)
my flow straighter then a base-line. yours slowly declines.
u an underground baby, fool i fly high like an airlines.
the bottem line is my flow upbeat, yea its sweet.
take a seat, grab a treat, let me preheat my fist while i cook up ur reciet....
(coo ender)
ok kinda has no meanin.. did it in class.. just a bunch of multies.
leave links later

good multis...decent wordplay, had some inners in some places.....this was str8 tho....good read....

i thought you did have a decent amount of multies.... this was more like a dipset thing with your multis i ratt tatt tat that gat that i clap and clap the gat that go ratt tatt tat

but still a decent flow and all around keep me reading...

keep elevating cuz u got potential...

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