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First drop LEME KNOW !!!
burn tracks wak rap cats earn urn's fast
blast first cuz questions for the devil to ask no ski mask aint hidin shit i walk my own path pyschopath trapped in a world of drugs n gats muthas huggin lost souls disposable like last nites trash shots pop while lifes flash b4 eyes an thats that my pesence is the definition of crossin a black cat bad luk is comin full force like a locamotive crash if u got beef im afta u aint no gangsta jus do wat i got to if your weak im ur echo i mock you ur popped i shot you layin face flat i dropped you read my lines learn a lesson you ought' to Im the head of the class still bloody ya mouf like u were sukin on glass u sucky wit raps while my bars rippin ya bak out literally ya spine no longa intact most emcees bars soft like wet noodles they whole deminor is cute fukin poodles from the slums go head and google....my adress the block watcha's alert the snipers to shoot you! ---kwik key drop jus showcasing a bit i hope this site isnt to fukin dead one |
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ight piece.. like someone said to me, it shows u got SOME talent u kno
i kno this a keystyle but, at least try to format it as if it was to a beat nice rhyme scheme.. keep droppin 6/10 |
keep elevating kid.....
4-10 |
Pretty cool, for a first timer...6/10
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This was decent for a first piece. Work on your multi's and vocab some more.
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At least this piece shows that you understand a rhyme scheme, but try not to have such a monosyllabic piece, try to include some multis and metaphors some other shit too dude, just keep workin on it.
5/10 - not bad for a new comer |
Display more to the mind then just gun n' such, keystyles are good but it limits the mind when it comes to imagry and emotion to of the most important cats in a OM, which will weigh down your rates for any of your pieces if you continue on such a path as this, but props on your first drop i'll keep in eye out on your improvement
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not bad,you definitly have potential,just work on all of the above and keep elevating
i felt like you got out what you were trying to say and it didnt sound to bad either.. |
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