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Hip Hop-My Shawty
One of my keystyles from the cypher
2nd verse keystyled comment yall, might use for a song ight yo, i grab it by its waist, n tell hip hop im diggin her// whisper in her ear a little literature// gettin her thighs warm, her clitorous n eyes wet-she cry'n// cuz aint nobody ever approached her the way that i did// i told her i would be there for good or the bad// n look past all the book-bagged looseteefs that got wit her// n spit hot lyrics mo rapid the the last rapper could// as a matter of fact, upgrade her dande-lions to lavender// now she want it so bad she taste it i will not give her any doubt about the, way i am raised go hard wit anything i put my mind ta// play but at the ryte times, n know wen to b adequate after~ so, now i sleep wit her, every day, sex is great// she ben tapped by alotta cats, but they very fake// she like wen i put my pen to her pad, lyrics to her skin// n reach her ever so critical nerve endings then// i rap, put my lips to her ears n recite// she say its rilly nice, she say she like it before it even begins// she say Keyz go harder, deeper in// she dont care if i cheat, thats how down for me she is// n if we break up-then we get back together, no matter how severred from, each other we have gotten// cuz us being unattached for long becomes a problem cuz nobody else can make her cum like, my-pumps n my toungue// no i dont eat her out, but my speech is how we came// to even be about, she dont care about my age// she just want me to keep tunrin her pages droppin that raw// n imma beat her back in from the back end dawg fa real iono, some shit.. lol feed yawlz |
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i liked the concept of this brah it was sumtin different kinda remindin me of this cormega song....a bit sloppy tho its undastandable cuz u say u keyed it but sum parts were hard to fallow y know...both verses started off good but kinda got cold...definatly make a good project tho...keep writin yo decent drop main!!!peep the frontlines yo
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yo thanx fo dat skep. man this site b dead joe.. lol, feed pleeze?
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keystyles are cool cos you can just go on without making sense and putting rhyme schemes together, but after you keystyle you should try taking the things you like about it and workin with it untill you get to a point were its not a keystyle and more of a focused script, i say that because there are really to many things i didnt like about this to write, and it is the fact its a keystyle in the open mic, for me i keep that in the cyphers and bring stuff i want critiqued in here...like i said not hating let that pen bleed...ya feel...peace
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this was a very enjoyable piece very thought out
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good shit though 8/10
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Uppin for this kid.......
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thanx joe.. i was startin to feel i was the only person liked this. lol, itta go raw to a beat
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