dutch vs Lay Fear
 

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Check in by: 04-04-08 at 11:39 AM

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Lay Fear has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-03-08 11:42 AM.

dutch has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-03-08 11:46 AM.

Do you believe yer HOLDING A BLAMMA big enough to give dutch HOLES IN HIS CANVAS? Sheeeit HOMIES BANANAS, now “A-SCAR’s ON HIS FACE” like TONY MONTANA!! 1
so FUCK YOU AND YOUR PEOPLE, BITCH, I BUCK TWO and this CHUMP FLEW LIKE AN EAGLE DID!
JUST KNEEL AND RECEIVE-THE DICK (fagot) quit actin HARD IN “BARS” like SOME PEOPLE I’M DRINKING WITH 2
LISTEN, STAN. These MISSILES CAN.. SPLIT YA DAMN PARTICLES!
I’ll send you on an “ICY YOU/i.c.u. VISIT” like TRIPS TO ANTARCTICA!!!! 3
it's not "Blueprints" but the "HEATER'S DRAWN" will touch your lifeline without READIN PALMS.
In my BLACK TRUCK with her ASS UP is where you SEEN YA MOMS. she made me bust-a "Quart" of nut, i aint wanna "LITER ON!!!" 4
and Tell me, ya verse, did I READ IT WRONG? Your skills dropped?? Since the last time I SEEN YA BARS your “Punch-lines” “got more fucked up” than SENIOR PROM!!!! 5


i've read he's last few battles and didnt see him elevatin : reference to bar 5

ey..listen..
I'll hit ya in the gut an after I'll eat you for lunch man
yo'll be ghost' when I ship these punches to flyin dutchman
you'll stumble much an I'll laugh as you crumble, clutch.
cuz you couldn show me the ropes even if u had a double' dutch
your fists will get weatherd man..like ya swingin wit a severed hand
cuz we know they call you Dutch, cuz your punches will 'netherland
You can't stand me...so don't act like you a fan, see
you so wrapped up in my text, I'll jus fuckin eat ya after I can'd
You astounded don't doubt it you ain't bout it, n ya style I'll clown it
cuz I'm whipe'n D off the map like I think Michigans better off without it

goodluck.

good verse, tight battle, good luck'

Voted For: Lay Fear

Dutch, you had a better verse then what I've seen in your other few battles but Lay Fear came hard. You just need to work on some wordplay better than what you got now. Don't forget that multis don't do shit if the punch is weak.

^ respect, lets keep it 100 fam good looking out

Voted For: Lay Fear

I'll hit ya in the gut an after I'll eat you for lunch man
yo'll be ghost' when I ship these punches to flyin dutchman
you'll stumble much an I'll laugh as you crumble, clutch.
cuz you couldn show me the ropes even if u had a double' dutch
your fists will get weatherd man..like ya swingin wit a severed hand
cuz we know they call you Dutch, cuz your punches will 'netherland

BLAT BLAT BLAT

ur pretty good, those bars were the killers you set the pace in the oppening, the can'd shit was kinda forced tho, s'all good

the "HEATER'S DRAWN" will touch your lifeline without READIN PALMS.
In my BLACK TRUCK with her ASS UP is where you SEEN YA MOMS

KO!!!!! lmfaooooo or not, cuz you suck the giant balls and will never be good cuz u cant elivate on a dead site so stop rapping ima dick blah blah I know stfu

v/ lay fear

This was feedback posted for Lay Fear
 

Pretty dank verse here...

it's not "Blueprints" but the "HEATER'S DRAWN" will touch your lifeline without READIN PALMS.
In my BLACK TRUCK with her ASS UP is where you SEEN YA MOMS. she made me bust-a "Quart" of nut, i aint wanna "LITER ON!!!" 4

thats my whole punch/wordplay

quote my whole punch next time u try and talk shit about me and if you feel like that then set it up with whatever bar limit and we can do this :thumbup:
CHUMP!@! :thefinger

Cannnn weeeeee getttttt voteeeessssssssssssssssssssssssss

Voted For: Lay Fear

Im sorry dutch, this battle goes to Lay Fear.

Lay- all in all, you had the better flow with better looking bars as well as better hitting bars as well.

you'll stumble much an I'll laugh as you crumble, clutch.
cuz you couldn show me the ropes even if u had a double' dutch
your fists will get weatherd man..like ya swingin wit a severed hand
cuz we know they call you Dutch, cuz your punches will 'netherland

hahaa shit was funny not gonna lie
Overall :: 7/10

Dutch- honestly your verse wasnt that bad.

and Tell me, ya verse, did I READ IT WRONG? Your skills dropped?? Since the last time I SEEN YA BARS your “Punch-lines” “got more fucked up” than SENIOR PROM!!!! 5

your closer was your best line but the structure and the flow was off. If that line had been worded more correctly, it wouldve been ultimately a better punch and the same goes for your whole verse.

And once again, dude dont number your bars, makes you look like your confused as to where you actually made an effort to hit him hard.

Overall :: 4/10

good battle you two, and check out my open mics.
pp

Voted For: Lay Fear

ur verse had a better flow and decent punches and dutch your verse was all over the pace and not organized so i give it to Lay Fear even tho he always votes against me(i dont know why?)

Voted For: Lay Fear

his verse hit much harder then dutches. Dutches verse seemed like he rush it which made it look unorganized and all over the place