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If It Were Us..
 If It Were Us. Written By: Xtreme Malice “The truth will set you free. But first, it will piss you off.” -Gloria Steinem Intro: The lightest of skin complextion, the shoes on the other foot Tho rightous moral directions, the skewers been over looked So fighting against perfection, just hope it gets understood Infestions wilst our progression, the sooner we get it took. Dressed in my favorite garments, the blackest layers of night.. ..stick harnessed, darkness atonished i've seen the light as my target Poorest beings roaming the hooded whether few minor... ..or teams, woest me? violent reaction fore these peasants can foriegn me Band of brothers for the cause hands out? I leave them hanging.. ...another for my quota, strikes down light'n w/ thunder Claims plunder bite through the chains see I favor the hunger Watching flesh corrode the minds, drips through dreams n' wonders Clash close enough to feel the bleeding pleads of the last.. ..so dangling over my head I'd hear the screams on a high note Stregnuous waste pacing until the end line hideous... ..race numb the leggings of their defeat more of a stimulant base Symbolism is great as long as they remain in the present.. ...box their past if they have a future even heavens shocked Each new senses its pleasure of necks on the beheaded slots For the night is young and death seems to be on its eleventh knot Matters not these torn infested lotus are needed sure.. ..renge armed before the bloom of these flowers pure? How could they? lacking intellegence seems these facts.. ...are irrelevant, their different with a hellous scent Pessimistic in the prime of a proper tense... ...it's sad this could be the thought of those of us wearing skin Outro: The sooner we get it took, infestions wilst our progression Just hope it gets understood, your fighting against perfection The skewers been over looked, Though rightous moral directions The shoes on the other foot, the darkest of skin complextions. "Two Wrongs Don't Make A Right.... ...Nor Would It Make Us Even"-Xtreme Malice http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245960 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3207533 |
mr. multie...
...first of all, your piece sucked ass. you're garbage and im ashamed to even have you on my squad. pack it up kiddo...YOU'RE OUTTA HERE!!! lol. jp. very impressive drop brutha. you wrote a very comprehensible and consistant piece. your vocabulary was above par. your flow was smooth. and your multies???...well, lets just say that you have earned your name, lol. you have officially been baptized in the o.m. waters. your drop was highly entertaining. i'd like to see more of work brutha. keep on keepin' on. proud to have you on board. boost the crhyme rate fam. the super |
Thanx for the feed, i'll prolly drop another this week, seeing as i've already drop for my ABL match on RB
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nice flow hommie the vocab was above average the concept was ill and multie was decent the vocab made the multie seem a bit better then normal which is cool but in a real life battle i cant see you spitting these kind of multies sorry so it was good but just not my kind of style but good drop
look for my newest drop coming soon its called MurDah pt1 |
Thanx for the feed, i've multi-battled plenty of times, don't worry ima audio head and i use multies even in my audio, in my topicals, and in my text.
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Yo i gotta give props on this. ya flow was vicious in the verse. the entire piece showed a good command of vocabulary. living up to your name, your multis brought out vivid imagery and thought. the topic of the piece demanded a true artist perspective and you wouldnt have gotten away with this being a great piece if you wouldve dropped any other way. as close to perfection as anyone couldve gotten. and i only say that cause theres always room for everyone to improve at anything
Nice track 9/10 |
No doubt thanx for the feed for real. drop something and I RTF
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Damn what can I say. Your mind is just amazing when you put it to the lyrical arts. Like this peice is amazing. i love the concepts and structure.And most of all i love how you play'd the your vocab. Is so smooth and moves just right(no homo fuckin cam'ron) but yeah. This peace is just on point.
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I believe i hit ya piece already but thanx for the feed, i like how the OM Forum is get'n more active.
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Word, is this Xtreme Malice from RB?
Lol. Anyway this piece was nice as hell man...good shit. You are definitely on the ball in everything I've read/heard from you. Vocab was nice, flow was easy to comprehend...Good shit. Keep it up man. :thumbup: |
Yeah im XM from RB, lol just keepin it current come'n bacc to RV thanx fo the feed.
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overall it was good drop it was creative good word play,good multis and it was real deep..
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