Died in your arms (unmixed)
 

didnt want to put this track up until i got it mixed or recorded it in the real studio but i thought id be there next week and it wont be until the week after. basically its your basic tragic love story. probably hard to hear the lyrics in this version so i posted the lyrics

http://profile.myspace.com/index.cf...endid=224599023

I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight
I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight
I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight


She say she died in my arms, love choked her up
then take a breather and fall back, its better for both of us
I'm bout to die every night no time to open up
and play this little games of why do fools fall in hopeless love
see im a rollin stone, make every little hole my home
no need for a companion, got barely enough to hold my own
to roll wit me gotta sacrifice for this road we on
loose ya identity, credit cards, and ya mobile phone
and you dont want that, missin all ya family
knowin if you talk to em cop's visitin ya family
pickin at ya family, tryin to locate ya wherabouts
the feds dirty, if they dont speak then they'll probably air em out
thats orders being carried out, crooked cop 101
a fugitive, im used to this, exactly what im runnin from
dont wanna have to go through that, the feelin that i hold u back
its your choice, if you choosin the man then it aint no turnin back

I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight, (Beleive that fore we leave baby we clappin at them)
I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight, (We goin out like queen latifah set it off to the end)

now i done told u then in and outs of my lifestyle
you standin wit that look in ya eyes like you wanna ride out
then get dressed and take this hammer from papa
we headin for the boarder mama, hope ya spanish is proper
you got me and i got you, no we aint bonnie and clyde
but you say you ridin to die then ill be right by ya side
bustin shots to keep alive wit my glock and my 9
we in the game until the buzzer nomore ridin the pine
shaq and kobe the unstoppable, i bang on em you pop a few
they aimin for my chick, sacrafice my body to stop a few
i know you'd do the same thing, anything to maintain
stability, its killin me, thinkin of ya body layed slain
naw i aint havin that, we endin this where marriage at
startin wit a ring and ima finish where a carriage at
yea you heard me right, i aint quittin until a baby born
im tryin to make you change from my shorty into my baby moms

I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight, (Beleive that fore we leave baby we clappin at them)
I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight, (We goin out like queen latifah set it off to the end)

(Bridge)
I keep lookin for somethin i cant get
broken hearts lie all around me
and I dont see an easy way to get out of this

Now you done been down for a hot minute
its exactly six months since you first got wit it
well patience done paid off, we makin moves in a hour
found a whole in boarder patrol, gone hop in the shower
ima load the 45 make sure ya shotty is preped
while you get ya body correct im re-supplying ya vest
need a light load, which one u want, the nine or the tek
you ready? then lets hit the road got twenty minutes at best
this the start of somethin amazing, kingpins in the flesh
we just a hopped fence away from being free to be us
just me and my lil deviant chick, hold up i see lights
we might just have to make a run for it and hope we be right
now trucks come from everywhere, bullets wizzin past my sight
i look back and see a few hit you so then i grab you tight
ya vest has been penetrated, barely catchin oxygen
i run into the crossfire so that youll be mine again

I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight, (Beleive that fore we leave baby we clappin at them)
I just died in your arms tonight, it mustve been somethin you said
I just died in your arms tonight, (We goin out like queen latifah set it off to the end)


left feed on Speats-Crying & Big Tony Self-Hip Hop lives ill edit links into my post
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=246798
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=246942

This will be solid with some decent mixing. Even though the quality is shit, i can till hear a solid track in there, somewere. lol.


Learn to mix!!!! lol
Get cool edit and Ill mix a few of your tracks and tell you the general things that need to be done to your tracks so you can learn yourself.

lol yea ima probably record it on cool edit today. where would i send it?

Judging from the lyrics this is solid nice flip on an old hook. When you put it on soundclick i'll download it.

Stay up

listening sick beat,sick intro, its hard to hear your voice, you do sound a little monotone,cant really hear the words,id like to hear the mixed version..

just listened again while reading lyrics, when mixed right this will be a good song.
good shit

Listening: Love this beat damnn, Good intro, Kinda long tho till it begins, The flow is dope, you remind me of a famous rapper but dont remember who, Lyrics are cool, quality like you said is so-so but meh the track is still great, overall 7.5/10 grood drop homie

word, nice ish fam.. mix that ish correct though

pretty dope nitro. im impressed. i'd love to hear this track mixed properly my crhymie.


esvee, cee-ess

This can be a good song
 

This could be a good song. The beat and the lyrics is on point. Good job! The only problem is the mixing. At some points ya voice sounds muffled. But other than that it's great.

^^^bumpin' for more feedback...


...the supe