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Civil. 02-14-09 03:43 PM

Pre Tourney Matchups: K.Stubbs .vs Young Kidd (LM) -open for feed-
 
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Civil. 02-14-09 04:02 PM

yessssir.
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Young Kidd (LM) 02-14-09 04:13 PM

lol well damn.
how imma get kris.. lol

Civil. 02-17-09 12:02 PM

Quote:
lol well damn.
how imma get kris.. lol


Dog, i aignt tryin to give u the cold shoulda, but u walkin in w/ cold feet
lookin like a fish out the water...the way you bitchin about the first week
I know u like young kidds, but ya singin sucks n ya can't rap bitch...
...And u can believe u can fly, but its not gon give u a better chance @ it
U'd never be ahead of the race, u gotta beat half the league to get past me
...and we all know that young kidd, just the black sheep in his family
U one of them back room boys, below the belt? Bitch, belt up!
Kidd, you wouldnt be on the ground...if i didnt help u with the punch
N i know you young' kid, fall back though! You aign runnin with me
This aign a fuckin game...
....quit followin the leader n joinin every one of my leagues

eh, its a pre tourney match

Civil. 02-19-09 04:46 PM

what....tha fuck? u betta show homie lol

Civil. 02-20-09 06:14 PM

Dammit. open for feed

Wordz AhGod 02-23-09 01:31 AM

Dog, i aignt tryin to give u the cold shoulda, but u walkin in w/ cold feet
lookin like a fish out the water...the way you bitchin about the first week
you might have to explain this one to me coz I dont get it.
I know u like young kidds, but ya singin sucks n ya can't rap bitch...
...And u can believe u can fly, but its not gon give u a better chance @ it
The setup was very irrelevent so it didn't help your punch and just became filler, the punch itself was presented weakly because you didn't really say anything about how you were going to make him fly or anything. You basically said that if he cane believe that he can fly then he will.. but what next?? feel too incomplete.
U'd never be ahead of the race, u gotta beat half the league to get past me
...and we all know that young kidd, just the black sheep in his family
This honestly didn't feel like a punch at all to me, I feel as though you like to toss around a lot of filler setups that do nothing but really just take up space, execution was not too good again here either.. Im assuming that you whent for a sort of nameplay concept here but it fell short drastically by you not saying why he is the black sheep of the family or having a wordplay or double meaning in the term "Black Sheep". If this was a pic battle and people could actually see that he is physically black as hell then you could properly word this to hit using that concept. Other then that, just saying he's that black sheep because his parents dont like him doesn't come off as a strong punch with a lot of thought in it.
U one of them back room boys, below the belt? Bitch, belt up!
Kidd, you wouldnt be on the ground...if i didnt help u with the punch
This one, I didn't really like at all either, your setups have the same problem through out your entire verse. This can easily be fixed and it becomes a good source that effects your wording overall.
N i know you young' kid, fall back though! You aign runnin with me
This aign a fuckin game...
....quit followin the leader n joinin every one of my leagues
This was weak, the flow and wording were both off and the setup felt as if you ran out of things and punches to put down. The concept could have been good with the appropriate wording but here it was way off.


Theres my feed, hope it wasn't as harsh as it was insightful. :thumbup:

Civil. 02-23-09 01:59 PM

lol thx...

k wins


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