flow sick
 

drop the beat... yall dance 2 my Feet like street
yea ya ass treated with defeat ya im sweet
i probably known for the rawrest flows ever
i smoke weed and after make mc's feel Seavered
Got problems with me and i'll solve them
cuz im 2 strong for you kill mcs and disolve dem
like suga,, u cant step on dis flow.. its heavy
haha got my dukes up ready for people who enemie
kill ya like hennesy, venmous, and the deadliest
haha u cannot compete wid me i got to much steadyness
stop precoking ya think ya verse can u hurt quit jokeing
i spit like im coking left holes in ya ass left ya body soking
Tech has spoken,,with ya eyes wipe and chest open uhh
i tell ya im the illest, people feel me watch my money smokin

ILL MAN!!!

keep this up and your going to the hall of fame!

u cant be foreal coke dealer^^^llol

haha i am.. remember friends.. i drop my verses to help everyone on the site.. because ive been through some bad stuff so.. i'll help anyone... and thanks.. chuffed u said dat coke dealer..

i will break this down
First 2 lines didnt really feel wasnt hard at all but it rhymed good so 5/10
Next 2 lines good couple lines but u cant say im probably known u gotta be confident in wat u say and stick behind it. 7/10
Next 2 lines flowed nice except first line was short on syllables so it didnt sound that great 6/10
next 2 lines i am deff not a big fan of first off stop haha shit cus no one else thinks its funny and instead of sayin "haha got my dukes up ready for people who enemie" that dont really make sense this aint much better but it would have sounded better if it was "I got my dukes up ready for people who envy me" so 3/10
Next 2 lines once again was not that funny and the hennesey line aint great cus hennesy dont kill unless u drink so much and keep drinkin and die from alcohol poisoning so 4/10
next 2 lines was to much sayin ya and shit and lil words and start usin ur words in the right context cus we know wat u mean but if we read it how u type it than it makes no sense dawg 3/10
next 2 lines not bad its really simple but not bad 7/10

I figured i would give u the breakdown instead of critisize u now u can take this and learn more ability u started out decent and kinda fell off thats not good either stay consistent or get strong.

its okay to critocise.. it was just a practice little freestyle... but i thought it was pretty okay...best lines were the ender and the duke one and the desolve them line was also good.. other lines wenr't as good.

if u have ery line as goood as the lines u thought were good than u come out wit a good at least decent piece of work if u jus go back in forth between ok and bad than ok and bad than it really isnt as interestin.
First things first practice the context u put the words in the word usage and spellin em right after that its really jus practice practice practice and u will start progressin.

ATTN: Technique.

i fucking told you DO NOT make rhyme threads in the Lyricist Lounge..

fucking write it down...........sticky tape it to your monitor so you dont forget..

if you make one more thread like this in here without a damn fucking good excuse i will ban you again. im not fucking around i made that very clear to you not to do this and what do you fucking do........ dont let this happen again..