My New Style Shines
 

i think i elevated again
this may be short but its pretty good


I sleep during the day because the evening can be deceiving

One second you’re howling at the moon the next second its leaving

Im heaving history at heathens abruptly disallowing breathing

Until they understand words have a plethora of meanings

Formally leaning with the masses accepting passes out of classes

Alas tasks of bitter aspects now leave me in the class of asses

Time harasses man with a multitude of medieval torture

You wake up in a cold sweat trapped in American pop culture

I represent the vulture, ruthless teacher, noble creature

Scavenger of the deadly arts, I represent the preacher

This evenings main feature depicts a tale of to much ale

Words stale but still impale with the strength of heated rails

Details fail to prevail the path taken to glory

If you’re looking for a happy ending I suggest another story

j
 

this was ight .... nothin hott

pretty gud
 

well idunno if you've elavated or not...i just bearly got back...but n e ways...

this had a nice rythm to it...it started off a bit slow...but gradually showed sum skill....
rat'n....7/10

listen to some aesop rock
like big bang or somthin and then you will see where im going
thanks peeps

I FEELIN DIS 1,DA WAY U ENDED IT OFF WAZ NICE.............

I represent the vulture, ruthless teacher, noble creature

Scavenger of the deadly arts, I represent the preacher

This evenings main feature depicts a tale of to much ale

Words stale but still impale with the strength of heated rails

Details fail to prevail the path taken to glory

If you’re looking for a happy ending I suggest another story

SHIT HAD ME ROLLIN,PIECE WAZ NICE,SUMPIN FRESH,TRY N TEACH SUMMA DEEZ FOOLS HOW 2 RAP,1

that shit was hot!
 

yo, man that shit was blazin, keep postin

it doesnt get much more aesop then this

Formally leaning with the masses accepting passes out of classes

Alas tasks of bitter aspects now leave me in the class of asses


thanks for the props

I found this piece ok, a lil more internals would of made it interesting, the vocabulary was ok, pretty good flow...

w3rd
i think this a little abouve your head but its coo
thanks for teh reply

yo dis shit was hott cause i heard aesop rock and dat was cool and dj verb is a wack mofo anyway so don't sweat him.
U can only get better ~1~