Breaking Off
 

with no motivation in life, is there any point in continuing to live?...as one situation escalate's beyond controllable..it's actions magnify in the worst possible way's and all circumstance's become immoral to your own personal gains..

.......broken

inhale my essence...a legend, formerly a man among men
born above a perfect ten, but now all knowledge is spent
college or rent?, knuckled under i spread my trouble from mortors
Man... float?, its hard enough to keep my head above waters
proceed into my quaters, and take a walk in these sneakers
high priest, only a fool doesn't understand what he preach's
honesty is the best policy for an untrustworthy character
im in the minus category and it takes 30 to reach amateur
im sadder but wiser, building from the error of bad ways
i can see the light, but this maze refracts it into three laid
paths you must be having a laugh, feeling the third degree
god with his tongue in his cheek, seeks ahead laughing at me
many are called but few are chosen, i was one of the hopeless
complete mental closure gazing for when truth has its moment
my ideas are much to do about nothing, say im something..please
because from birth, life forgot to dot my i's and cross my t's
ive lost my plea's for gracious living, im along for the ride
in this little experience labled time, which is more than life
where i got handed the graveyard shift, weren't taught to exist
i reminiscse to the days when, to rule the roost wasn't a gift
but this twist is pulling me deep within, feeding me sins
soaked my blanket in the fact whose bread i eat, his song i sing
i long to win for once and gallop the days with flying colors
win one for the gipper, myself.. although my sighting wonders
about the mighty blunders and being behind the eight ball
can i make the game over, or is it another one that fate scores
my mindstate falls into a status of a lacking consciousness
no defense like a good offense, breathing for the sunsets kiss
but having to skip nine miles of bad road instead of chickening out
im between a faux pas and the fifth wheel and with it is doubt
a living coward towering above the rest of societies cravens
can you see this patience leaking and being seasoned by ravens
early to bed early to rise, makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise
these are false statements to live by, as im even helpless to die

Yo N-demik i've posted on every one of ya shits dat i've seen and i feel ur on dat intellectual tip so i can feel da rhymes big ups to u dawg u can only get better. ~1~

Damm, I haven't been here in a while, and this the first thing I've read since, shit was tight man, no doubt...
Good vocab, consistent flow, and the concept is good...
"im along for the ride
in this little experience labled time, which is more than life
where i got handed the graveyard shift, weren't taught to exist
i reminiscse to the days when, to rule the roost wasn't a gift..."
^No doubt this is street poetry here...
Good shit man...


Oh yo, I don't know was going on... see like a week ago I replied on some threads... then I posted something for the topical open mic... but for some reason non of that was there when I checked bout 2 days ago... like it got erased or somethin... and I can't open any of my old threads or the topical open mic thread...
don't know was going on...

Wow 2 Replies...

DiggityDowning

lmao....

nice drop demik...spread my trouble through mortars...that was nice line,mad imagery all round,the dotting the i`s and crossin the t`s line was clever,...high preist only a fool would understand what he preaches<no doubt...that line was ill....shit was deep as fuck,i know how you feelin with this ahha...you gonna be doin this on audio??where i got handed the graveyard shift....werent taught to exist...damn...anyways,shit was ill no doubt demik,again another ill drop...lookin forward to listenin to the audio ;)....aiight then


bismillah

Wat up to tha N-Man...Nice shit...Once again blessin' tha RB scene...This shit was dope as hell...But that's usual for U dawg...But I liked tha concept of this one a lot...And tha way U wrote this was really nice...Tha first 2 lines were really nice and drew me into this deeply...

inhale my essence...a legend, formerly a man among men
born above a perfect ten, but now all knowledge is spent

Nice multi's and inner rhymin' too...Keep it up fam...Peace

Thanks For The Reply You Two :D

Demik tored this shit up.............Nice shit dawg.......................

Hot shit, i've been gone for a while, but between then and now, you've still proven to be amongst the illest on this site...keep droppin the hot shit, i admire your skill...you are a lyrical genius man...keep it up dogg...

P.e.a.c.e.

.....excellent.......datz all i can say

Damm, I haven't been here in a while, and this the first thing I've read since, shit was tight man, no doubt...
Good vocab, consistent flow, and the concept is good...
"im along for the ride
in this little experience labled time, which is more than life
where i got handed the graveyard shift, weren't taught to exist
i reminiscse to the days when, to rule the roost wasn't a gift..."
^No doubt this is street poetry here...


good shit there


liked this peice

LoL...These one line replies is mad comedy to me...1) they prolly read only tha first bar 2) they didn't undastand it so they stopped readin 3) they juss decided to reply to add to their post count and try to get U to peep their shit....Uppin' for N-Man...Peace

^^lmao innit ture...

This was good. Had a nice flow to it. Good rhyming. Like Mentill said, the first lines got me into it. Those 2 were really good.

"i can see the light, but this maze refracts it into three laid
paths you must be having a laugh, feeling the third degree
god with his tongue in his cheek, seeks ahead laughing at me"

Those were the other lines I liked a lot out of it. I feel that way sometimes. Not much more that I can add to why this is good since most already hit on it. Good post.