No More
 

I remember the days, when you were my one and only...
but now a days, even when I'm with you, I'm still lonely...
Now I know, our love was fake never real...
nothing is now, all I feel...
No More shall our hands touch.....
No More shall I lie to you because it's too much...

It's all over I can't pretend anymore....
for the past week, I've spent my days on the floor...
Thinking, what in the world is missing...
when, we haven't done a thing different...
But, for the some reason the love is gone...
I can't keep telling you I love you because I know it's wrong...

upp'n....^

sup K-D..
This was a very powerful, even scary piece..

>I remember the days, when you were my one and only...
but now a days, even when I'm with you, I'm still lonely...

wshew..thats something I know no one would want to hear..a lot of the times its an inevitable statement tho.

>Thinking, what in the world is missing...
when, we haven't done a thing different...
But, for the some reason the love is gone...
I can't keep telling you I love you because I know it's wrong...

You easily put a lot of background information into this piece and also projected what you were feeling currently, which is a lot to do in such a short space, but you did it well....And I think this is what makes the ending so hard-hitting..Really grips your heart and makes you think.
I thought this was an ill piece.
Stay up n keep writing.
Peace n propz!

A piece that i'd consider compact, yet simmering with downbeat emotions of realisation...

....okay, so maybe at times a bit off...but some of the imagery and detail you used...more than made up for it...

..it seemed very heartfelt...

...respect...