Change of Tide
 

for some reason, your words get to me/
an i wish i could be, some-one whos life aint so empty/
cuz when im lying in bed/
everything you've said, starts to run through my head/
I've only got my pride/
the rest of me's died, lifes a bumpy ride/
feels like I'm on a skid/
cuz of all the stuff u did, when u acting like a kid/
I fuken hate u/
makin my life look blue, am gona see this shit through/
your just contemptible/
for makin others miserable, but ur disposable/
one day some-one's gota do it/
I'll be sayin "I knew it", "Fuck you" and "Screw it"/
all these people in ur past/
the ones you've harassed are gona come back and you wont last/
you couldn't contemplate/
all the god-damn-hate, but its too late/
to whipe ur slate clean/
for doin your routine, of being so obscene/
you thought it was fun/
but now u start to run, when it's me holdin the gun/

it was ok
 

It was ok....you need work though....to me it seemed like you were searchin' for words to rhyme...i hate to say it cause i don't really do it either, but try to make your vocab more vast....but it had a decent flow.....a little choppy cause of the words you choose.....but good drop

it was n ight rhyme...not feelin it too much but i liked the topic...needs more complexity...try puttin some metas in there as well..anyways keeps droppin..one

I agree with spitz, you got descent skillz.. you do really need to work on vocab, throw in some more complex words once 'n' a while.. it'll go a long way in the long run.

Not shabby. I may have had a moral dilemna with it.
But I think what showed me it was a good post was the fact that I was left wanting. It seemed like the flow was taking off, and then —drop—. So it's good that I wanted to see more, but you also lacked finality. And finish, but we're all working. Peace. Good luck with killing your former lover.

it was ok...nothin special...learn how to count bars