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.can the leaders of this site tell me what they think of this rhyme please? be as brutal as ya gotta be! this rhymes is inteded to be done pretty fast, and i think it has a good flow. check it out


now you dont know my flow
ya try things but you cant hit
ya know you dont own my flow
ya see i know that u gotta go
to where i tell ya
when i come thru
ya cant control my flow
ya sound more ugly than a crow
ya hurt my ears when i hear the things that u call a flow
supreme slayer never stall a flow
with more variety
than how a nigger always roll the draw
ya know ya you aint heard this before
you come once than you always wanna ask for more
i wanna make a stack befo
i stop writin
and i aint runnin out of gas for long
supreme slayer make opressers run
and yall know that my team is hundreds thousands strong
and the way your allowed to rhyme
for more time than an eye blink
is too long and thats wrong
so
ya know imrockin til ya drop
ya know i aint gone ever stop
ya know im gonna make your ears go POP
ya know you love the way i sow my crop
nat always erase the fakes
in any place
at a great pace
if they come in my space
and act great
when they flows be dilapidated
they only hot
when they flows i evaporate em
or i can freeze em
and crate em
take em to three mile island
if the armed forces will take em
flows so hard
you could never put a stake in em
so strong
an earth quake aint shakin em

well I ain't a leader... but still, let me give you my opinion...

whatever you do man... keep posting and reading from other, more experienced peeps in this site, so you can get better... you know... so you can see how it's done... cause dawg... your skills right now need mad fucking work....
First of all... your basically saying the same thing in every rhyme... just worded differently... you got a tight flow, and that you hot...
but you ain't really showing that though...
Second... your flow aint' smooth at all, it's way off man...
And try to talk about something other than you skills... show them, not just say you got'em...
Just keep working on it man... write on the cipher forum, that's good practice, and here too...
Thas it then, peace