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lord cradle me in your arms and never let me slip away
im livin this life for all the wrong reasons
and i see many more thats gone astray
a lost child with many secrets to hide
my tears could be a river from all the nights ive cried
and still my faith is strong in the man above
because through it all
he was the only one that showed me love
i know that i talk as if im already gone
but what else is there for me to do
when ive lived 10 hard years on my own
a lifetime of heartache's was all my family ever gave me
at that point in my life God couldnt even save me
i lead a life that seemed so unreal
my life was touched when i picked up the bible
and from then on all the past scars started to heal
it scares me to know that i was heading in the wrong direction
at times i didnt even try because it's impossible for life to ever meet perfection
i understand now that we all live to die
and if you're not using time it'll pass u bye
so let loose of everything and let the man above wipe your eyes dry

God... odd subject in so many aspects.

You believe in God and believe in the bible. I don't, but I have my reasons. And as such, you have your own. And I respect that, you got your dealio and all set. In a way I kinda envy that. If the bottom drops out on me, I got no one to turn to. You got Jesus. Thats something to be proud of.

Mo-Mentai.

thank you good lookin out i didnt believe in god either but when i was out on my own i found my self wit noone there to trust and many times ive cheated death being only a 17 yr old female u would never think that. and i find peace some how when i read the bible and pray.

I dunno...i felt it was kind of 'off and on'....like the emotions only came out in short bursts...with the effect being that the rest is just lacking...

...almost like theres so much powerful emotions you wanted to release...but the creative channels were so few this time....that it became more grinded....and that's how this piece came to be...

...i mean it had it's moments...and i felt part of it dragged the piece overall along to make it quite a raw piece....i could see a certain amount of your powerful emotions in it...

...but what i'm saying is, maybe not enough...

...it's happened to me before...when the channels just burst or dissapear, leaving you with too few creative channels to depict the emotions you feel in a way which can enable the reader to feel a certain amoutn of them...


....i say all this, cos i've seen some of your other pieces....and so thats what it seems like to me...

....respect...

thanx good lookin out. i know it has its weak spots that because it is the original form i wrote that when i was 14 and thought it should stay that way as a rememberance of the struggles i was goin through at that time. it was like a taste of what was bound to come in the futurebecause u never really meet peace until you've suffered. but thanx fa da feedback.1