Metaphorical collisionist
 

A night shifter,cold blister razor blade/
leave you in the dark, like ace of spades/
I place-this-shade to erase-ya-place/
leaving your lyrics diminshed with a vocal crazed-grenade/
so I change-this-rage and enhance the rate-of-hate/
Cause while im spittin off the dome you rattle-the-cage/
and you battle-with-tape cause i left you cut/
Your a page, im scissor so that aint enough/
Dont try to front with thoughts to dluzioned/
I left a straight jacket crooked and turned the pope into jewish/
turned psycosis into music, and left the solid fluid/
while asylum institutions causes mass confussion/
a shadowy figuere leaves you without a light/
Now you like a shadow, stepped on day and dissapear at night/
without a sight, while im fly takin flight/
To excite x-cutions while i play with knives/
while i manipulate the devil and play with lives/
Cause im crazy enough to fuck the bee queen and take the hive/
i pulled up the devils blouse and heard his heart pump fear/
Ya could call me the ear infection cause im too ill for ears/
A supersonic demonic logic starts to unfold/
ya couldnt catch me if i was a cold.../

yeah this was descent...
I wasn't feeling all of it, but I liked a good part...
Yo man, you got a nice flow... the vocab was good, and the rhymes were aight... not all that...
Not too complecated, not too simple, short and sweet, I was able to read it all without getting bored...

Peace

I on the other hand, got bored... you had vocab, and some rhyme skills, you gotta work on a consistant flow... maybe it is ill tho.. that's what I hate about textuals because you don't know what beat scheme the rhymes written to... NE way, keep droppin'

every thing got better after your 1st 2 bars. cause honestly dogg
i didn't get the leave you in the dark like an ace of spades. but it was decent though.

damn uh? maybe you're existence is metaphorical for "i can drop metaphors" anyway... yeah, what most the other cats be sayin', nice for a while... but to me... it kinda died fast, your words and fillers were too damn crowded... made it like a few sentences before you reached the end of a line... anyway... peace












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