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Statin Tha Facts
im ready to rip the script! holla
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I think the flow is tremendous.
But in the beginning... I don't know. I'd say this is something that works better as an audio piece. When you really break it down lyrically, particularly the beginning. It's spinning its wheels like mad but the words don't actually mean anything. And towards the end, the bars lengthen a little which is counterproductive to the style I was feeling. But right in the middle, it all works well. I think you definitely have talent though. Keep it up. |
im not sure what u mean by anything not meaning anything. although i do know what your sayin other than that. this was made for using outloud and not in text but i figured it would show some of yall my style. thanks for the feedback.1
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"My 2 Cents..."
The flow was completely on point, no fuck ups (except for my own reading errors...lol) The wordplay was excellent. The only problem I seen was the use of vocabulary, your words were limited, and constantly repeated...not good for any writtin verse, I suggest you rap like this when you freestyle, or keystyle, but when wriitn shit is dropped, it's best to have good usage of vocab in your verse....
Thats the only thing wrong, vocab... Keep elevatin, stay spittin........ P.E.A.C.E. |
no doubt.holla
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uppin
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2 replies other than my 5, come on now
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Tight
Your Rhymes were peace...Good Foreplay and they stayed on track...Nice setup and execution...Good rhymes. :)
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