Dissin wack emcees that think they the shit
 

another site i'm on has some kids that thing they the shit...and they aren't so i wrote this up


some of ya'll bitches don't know what hip-hop is
dismiss real rap just ta' add names to ya win list
and i'm pissed, for real, cuz all you think it's ill
to make a "hot~punchline", then say ya opponent got killed
rap wasn't built to be split, it was made to be poured
and made to be flowed, which you know but still choose to ignore
here, let me give ya'll an example of why i choose to complain
i'm not beefin, i just wanna make it clear that it brings me pain
when emcees think they tight, rappin rhymes like these:
"YO DOG I'ma~splat" -- an "AttAcK" -- on~all you "~~EmCEES~~" -- cuz you "wack" -- so take that -- my lyrical-gat -- go mothafuckin "RAT-TAT-TAT-TAT"
what the hell? what was that shit suppose to mean?
did you write it in invisibile ink? cuz to me it can't be seen
i dont get it man it just doesn't make much sense to me
rhymes so complex you put a vex on ya self! don't you see?
lines that only rhyme at the end of each one of 'em
but some of 'em don't even do that, their endings frontin
learn what the fuck rap is and then maybe we'll chat
i'm loosin battles front to back, just cuz voters dont know how to act
and the BEST rappers on the site are responsible for this lack of knowledge
cuz they spit these kinda rhymes as if they went to the best hip-hop college
so the voters, who dont know any better, think its the shit
then they start to spit the same shit which aint worth bein bit
but you dont quit, you've mesmerized yourself into thinkin its good
yet its yet to be understood how you can do this and still claim manhood
and i could keep goin on, but i wont cuz it wouldn't do much
just realize ya dont shoot real rap, not even with your ~"illest-touch"~

this is ok, the flow isnt that great the rhymes are kind of simple, but you have potential. you need some multis, and if you going to diss people at least use some punches. but keep posting you will get better

yeah yeah all these peeps bitchin about styles hey if you aint hot u aint hot if they vote for the other emcee suck it up has a loss thats whut battling's all about what makes the fans cream and if your shit dont do that then your wack and thats that son

"what the hell? what was that shit suppose to mean?
did you write it in invisibile ink? cuz to me it can't be seen"

The rhyming n the lines were ok and the topic was real just I don't think it was really worth writting about cuz theres no real story line. Was original and creative an all dont get me wrong :) With a better topic you'd probably be able to let lose some ill rhymes n stuff