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Tony D 02-25-03 10:17 PM

yo
 
yo, it doenst even matter if i rhyme on this pad, in high school, i was always considered bad, not in the way other kids were, they were fags. always talkin about bags, a couple kids came up to me wantin to fight and all they did was mutter i said whats the beef, then they said WHAT?, i said excuse me, did i s-s-s-stutter?. My economics teacher was a flake he got caught up in a rape while I was at home skippin school eatin a drakes coffee cake during an earthquake. these rap contestants think they can flow?, yo theyre trippin off their dro,No one can battle against Tony D, you know who i be, you think u got mad power?, youll get plucked like a flower, who you tryin to hurt?,I'll run you through the dirt, believe me, thatseven worse then seein nas in a rocawear shirt.PEACE

C-Section 02-26-03 07:42 PM

are you serious? this is wack. wrok on every thign and break int down into bars instead of making it look like a essay for school do it like this

sdfgsdfgsdfgdfgdgdfgs/
asddgaadgsdgdfgdfgs/
asdfasdfsdfsdfasdfsdf/
asdfsadfsdfsdfasdfsdf/

Lady_Lek 02-26-03 07:53 PM

damn dawg, this piece needs work
ya flow is mad elementary
work on bars like he said^^
work on vocab n concepts,
jus work,
n yo plz dont try ta down other mc's if this is what ya bringin cuz you'll definetly get roasted
*constructive crit.*

DictionAddiction 02-26-03 08:04 PM

im not tryin to rip on you dude, but dont always use the first ryme that comes to your head, thats what fucks people. A real emcee would never ryme drakes cakes in anything ok

Black Magik 02-26-03 10:07 PM

Word, I must agree with the rest, piece needs much work and emcee needs elevation.

PD 02-27-03 05:59 AM

Don't hate... elevate... this had beginner written all over it. Keep working at it. It will come in time. Peace...

Tony D 03-02-03 01:28 PM

I respect what u guys said, i need to work at it thanks. peace


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