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yo, it doenst even matter if i rhyme on this pad, in high school, i was always considered bad, not in the way other kids were, they were fags. always talkin about bags, a couple kids came up to me wantin to fight and all they did was mutter i said whats the beef, then they said WHAT?, i said excuse me, did i s-s-s-stutter?. My economics teacher was a flake he got caught up in a rape while I was at home skippin school eatin a drakes coffee cake during an earthquake. these rap contestants think they can flow?, yo theyre trippin off their dro,No one can battle against Tony D, you know who i be, you think u got mad power?, youll get plucked like a flower, who you tryin to hurt?,I'll run you through the dirt, believe me, thatseven worse then seein nas in a rocawear shirt.PEACE

are you serious? this is wack. wrok on every thign and break int down into bars instead of making it look like a essay for school do it like this

sdfgsdfgsdfgdfgdgdfgs/
asddgaadgsdgdfgdfgs/
asdfasdfsdfsdfasdfsdf/
asdfsadfsdfsdfasdfsdf/

damn dawg, this piece needs work
ya flow is mad elementary
work on bars like he said^^
work on vocab n concepts,
jus work,
n yo plz dont try ta down other mc's if this is what ya bringin cuz you'll definetly get roasted
*constructive crit.*

im not tryin to rip on you dude, but dont always use the first ryme that comes to your head, thats what fucks people. A real emcee would never ryme drakes cakes in anything ok

Word, I must agree with the rest, piece needs much work and emcee needs elevation.

Don't hate... elevate... this had beginner written all over it. Keep working at it. It will come in time. Peace...

I respect what u guys said, i need to work at it thanks. peace